I like this, but i finished reading it wondering why he had no interest in her. Maybe it could have another stanza explaining why? I don't know, just a suggestion. I like this though, because it is unique. I don't think i've read a poem before like this. Good work. Keep it up. =]

Tammie

I like how you make the reader think about it...very very good job...but would you mayb still make a sequel?