Very interesting. I like how you chose to expieriment. This is something I usually do not see. But I like it. I don't even know if I could write a poem so short and still give it meaning. It is fantastic. Keep it up.
sincerely
~skittles

I really like this
i think its really good when people try out new poem layouts there normally reeally good
and yours was !
mexxx

That was excellent. The poem is made into a style which forces it to be very short, however the meaning was clearly conveyed and expressed well.

Nice job.

Wow! I looked at this style, and it seemed so very difficult. You did an amazing job of it. This has so much power and meaning in such a short poem. You nailed it! Excellent write. =] 5/5

Tammie xo

WOW... thats a really good sijo... hehe... like all your other poems... its a wonderful write! you're good at the syllables and rhyme.. keep it up!!

~angel~

Wow, that was a deep poem. Short, but it tells a story. Not in detail, but the readers can make it up as they read. Nicely done!

I really do not like the style at all. I just didn't feel this poem like I did the rest of your poems... It just didn't have your essence around it, if that makes sense. Sorry to be so harsh.
However, it isn't a 4.0 poem, quite. More like a 4.7... So, I'll give you the 5. Sorry, sweetie. Just my opinion.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

Wow, your an amazing poet.. and whoever doesn't agree .. does not know what it takes for someone to be an amazing poet.