Very good poem. I loved it. The only thing I saw that you might want to chance is that in the third line of the second stanza at should be to. Other then that this poem is great. You are a great poet. Keep up the good work:)
Im goin to start out by sayin "En Memoria de Lillian (In Memory of)". Of course I didnt know her but I show luv 2 ere body. I really liked dis poem. I felt da same way when 3 of my homeboys were murdered n 1 commited suicide b/c of it. NE wayz stay strong n keep ya head up.
The syntax was abit off in this which left the floww not sit well. The message was strong however and was a great tribute to the person you wrote this for I am sure they would be proud Good Job. This is the thrird Poem Plot121