Comments : What Goes UP, must come DOWN!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by ForeverYoung

    Hmm... angry poem! well written though, nice rhyming!
    Love steph

  • 17 years ago

    by Good Enough

    Keep up the good work 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    This was great! I'm definitally adding you to my favorites. I love your last two stanzas the best!

    Problems:
    you wont stop, **won't

    and your structure... capitalize each letter in the beginning of each line.

    But there's one thing,
    That will make you frown,
    You may not know,
    But what goes up, must come down!

    See?

    Other than that... your rhyming was amazing and your flow and vocab were too. GREAT JOB!

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    It's so true, this poem was well written and flowed nicely, excellent job 5/5 for sure

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    I really like this poem. It's got a nice rhythm and flow to it. It's something that I'm sure many people can relate to. Great job on this! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem expresses the gravity of the reality catches up us all it is true love that makes our word circle the light. I love the way you put it

  • 17 years ago

    by Allison

    There wasn't really a flow to this one. None of the sylables(sp?) seemed to match up. *4/5*

    Alyson

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This is a perfect poem which s written greatly. keep up the great work, your poems are great and you are really talanted. a 5/5 from me.

  • 17 years ago

    by UnToLd TrUtH

    I really loved this title and it fits your poem really well. You showed a lot of emotion in it and it was a great read for me. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Laybelled with a name

    Thats a lovely poem!!! the ryming was real preeeeeeetyfulls!!!! :) Kind of angry though, but still nice!!!!! :)oxoxoxoxoxo

  • 17 years ago

    by Moon Princess

    +.+ Even tho it was like a sad/angry poem the ending still made me smile! And thanxs for commenting on my poem and agreeing with me!! I love our environment, but it's getting stuffed up +.+

  • 17 years ago

    by *Isolde*

    Hmm that was a good poem. Could of been better. 4/5 keep it up.

  • 17 years ago

    by bon

    I like this poem, the title itself grabs your attention, i also like the honesty and truth in this poem. Good job! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Michelle18

    Very agressive poem!! excellent job!! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Katlynn

    This was a great poem, very true also but i don't see where this poem can be sad or anything. It should be in the life catagory[sorry if i spelt that wrong] but besides all that this was a great poem.

    keep it up. keep on writing. also thanks for the comment on my poem means alot to me. love always and forever.

  • 17 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    Very agressive poem keep it up. keep on writing i liked it but do agree with the others its not sad its great and deserves to be posted some where other than sad poems.

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashley

    I like it !!!!!!!!!!!! it is just like tells the facts or what ever