A young man, an old man, a father and me

by Pianist   Dec 13, 2006


When I look in this mirror,
do you know what I see?

A father of one,
to her, somebody.

When I look in this mirror,
do you know what I've seen?

A crippled old man,
of just seventeen.

When I looked in this mirror,
do you know what I saw?

A young man forgetting
that he too has flaws.

When I look in this mirror,
do you know what I see?

A young man, an old man,
a father and me.

A young man, an old man,
a father, and me.

Copyright © 2006 Nobody

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  • 17 years ago

    by Cindy

    I liked this poem. I like the way of seeing three diffrent people in the mirror. Very good job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Delie

    Great job, there's a whole story there, in just a few words

    awesome

  • 17 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I liked this.
    My favourite part was the repetition you used, I think it made the poem more powerful.
    The other reason I liked it was because it was original and unique in concept.

  • 17 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Nice job! It was very original, but most of your poems I have noticed are very original.
    You had a great flow and I could understand the meaning that you were trying to get across. Wonderful write.

    Also, I loved the repetition at the end. It added a little something extra to the poem! Keep it up! 5/5

    Stephanie

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Nice poem, with a great message. keep it up.5/5

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