Beneath The Surface

by twisted reality   Jan 5, 2007


Streaming hair so soft and blonde,
Is too complete for a respond.
Jaws are dropped with a gaze,
From her eyes all ablazed.

Wings that are so cotton white,
Make perfect seem so perfectly right.
Too pure for us to simply hold,
Like shiny, flawless, heavy gold.

Gliding stride so full and long,
Such like a gracious love song.
Lyrics you may simply see,
May not be understood fully.

Underneath those ice blue eyes,
She has herself completely disguised.
Far from perfect is she yet,
As she creates her dark silhouette.

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Random poem I had to do for English class. I will always return the favours of votes/comments.

**Fully and see may not seem like they rhyme, but you have to read it with an annonciation on fully.
EX: Fully --> Full - ee

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  • 16 years ago

    by GoodMEMORIES

    Wow i read this poem and my imagination went crazy... i think that you are an amazing poet... It really made me think... you were so descpritive with your words!!!!

    I love this stanza:

    "Wings that are so cotton white,
    Make perfect seem so perfectly right.
    Too pure for us to simply hold,
    Like shiny, flawless, heavy gold."

  • 16 years ago

    by shade127

    This was a beautiful piece with lots of imagery and description. Enjoyed reading it. The first few lines pulled me in and made me want to keep reading. excellent work!

    PEACE and BLESSINGS
    ~Shade127

  • 17 years ago

    by isabel

    So beautiful...

    *isabel*

  • 17 years ago

    by Tammie

    I like this poem. I love the description within it and the imagery it creates. I think the second line, instead of respond it should be responce, although I know that doesn't rhyme, it's the word that fits there. Other than that, a really great poem. 5/5

    Tammie

  • 17 years ago

    by BloodScars

    I like it alot. though there could have been more medophors to hide what it ment..it was still good because i know what you were talking about and felt what went behind this to write it
    5/5

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