Comments : I (Pleiades)

  • 17 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I've never seen this style before. Very unique, in my opinion. Sad poem this time, but I liked it.

  • 17 years ago

    by Bryan

    Well i think you did a great job steph, especially because this is your first go at this style, i give it a 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Harry P

    Its a nice poem and its a new style for me, i'll try to composed the same next time, keep up the good work steph!

  • 17 years ago

    by donk2ymouth

    Well. I like this poem.
    It's great, I think you should write more Pleiades, it's kind of lacking adjectives, but due to the type of poem it is, I think it works fine. Keep up the good work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Wallace

    Very good poem, I really enjoyed it keep up the good work.

    PS. Plz rate and comment on some of my poems and I'll return the favour.

  • 16 years ago

    by robin milford

    I enjoyed this great job thanks for your comment on "Wind beneath my wings"

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    Interesting stlye. I lke it. :D
    Good poem, as well. There was one thing, and one thing only I didn't like.. The words you used to rhyme. They're so tiny, I just.. don't like it. Lol. My thoughts. But, good poem.
    Keep it up.

  • I enjoyed reading this style. It twas sad. *Tear*

    Anyhow, the flow was pretty good. And I liked the message. Keep it up. =) 5/5
    ~Ally~

  • 16 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    I don't like the repetion of "I", but I know it is required for the type of poetry.
    Not too bad, a little cliche, but oh well.
    Not too bad.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

  • 16 years ago

    by Marie

    I dont like I as the word.. really cliche..also I didnt think it was wise to rhyme the first 4 lines then stop the last 3.. it kinda messed up the pattern.. I like the word choice tho.. I think it's about a 3.5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    Even if it wasn't my bar of chocolate, it was, in fact, a fine work on the whole. I just thought there's too much telling rather than showing, though.

    You have my props for writing a formed poetry, nonetheless. =] All the best and take care.

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    I liked this poem. It gave me an idea for one of my own. I liked the flow and the word choice. I gave it a 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    I've never seen or even heard of this type of poetry. I think you did a good keeping to it. Though, it seems rather simple, with title you chose and the words begining each line. Still 5/5

    marcella

  • Wow, this is a good poem. I totally loved it. 5/5

    <mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    This sounds like it's written straight from the heart, with great flow and raw emotions.
    There are too many repetitions for my taste, but other than that, good poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Faithless Watermelon

    Definitely not bad, but it didn't really grab my attention. I don't really know how to help you with that, at least on this one. Like I said, it's not bad, but I think you could have made it much more powerful if you used a little more description, or just more descriptive or specific words.