Comments : Erase My Life As You Erase My Pain

  • 12 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    This poem is so sad n really moving i can relate to the lines:

    And i wish i had a pencil
    And draw my life again

    i think these were very deep, well done

  • 12 years ago

    by Cary Farrar

    Great job!

  • 12 years ago

    by xPerfect Chaosx

    Awesome job!! So well done!!! I love this poem... and I can connect w/ it!! Thanx for the comment on my poem! 5/5!
    Much Love,
    ~*Danielle*~

  • 12 years ago

    by PoetryHeart

    This was very well done, beautifully written, and seems to come from the heart. what more could the perfect poem have? thx so much for the comment on my poem. meant a lot to me! keep writing chica!

  • 12 years ago

    by CY GINDLE

    Love deep poems and they don;t get
    deeper then this,5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by nicole

    5! i really liked this one

  • 12 years ago

    by lala

    5/5 you have some real talent ^^

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This was really sad, i liked the flow and the rhyme scheme.
    a lovely poem, well done
    love Tara-Kay
    xxxx

  • 12 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Very nicely written. I loved it. The flow as well as the structure was good.

    This line,"And draw my life again" would make you poem flow better if you said it this way, "To draw my life again" Other than that, amazing poem.

    Peace, Joe

  • 12 years ago

    by Perfection

    I enjoyed this, very good keep it up =)

  • 12 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Hmm this poem is odd in my oppion...but overall i think its pretty good...but mayb im translating wrong but you cant erase your own pain...you have to heal it.....well a 5/5 for me

  • 12 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    This was amazing and beautiful. You showed a lot of talent in this, keep the poems coming! 5/5

    ~jas~

  • 12 years ago

    by Teria

    'Nothing in my childhood
    Nothing in my past
    Can erase this disappointment
    Can erase this shadow black'

    My favorite part.
    I loved this whole poem..
    But, that part just, it had meaning to me, I guess. Lol.
    You did a great job on this one.
    My favorite so far.

  • 12 years ago

    by steve

    This poem is my favorite by you, its dark and has some very interesting points, if you could draw your life in just one picture what would it be and what colors would you use, I never thought of it before 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This was beautiful!
    So very sad, yet such a pleasure to read.
    You did a fantastic job with the imagery and wording.
    I think you did a wonderful job on this.

  • 12 years ago

    by Kristina

    Awww this is very sad, but i enjoyed reading it very much. although in some spots in didnt flow all the way through it was still did. and i loved the idea about the poem. wonderful job! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 12 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    Wow. Incredible metaphor for depression. Great write, nice imagery.
    5/5
    ~Stephen White

  • 12 years ago

    by *Isolde*

    Oh my god..this poem is great 5/5 keep it up..i really liked it.

  • 12 years ago

    by lost in lovee

    Ohh dat was so nice 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    Very very sad!
    its like this person didnt have a nice life since childhood and its very emotional...

    keep it up