Comments : Omnipotent.

  • 17 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    I cannot find one thing to criticise within this poem, it was so clever n really thought provoking, it really made me think about things, well done

  • 17 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    In Stanzas 12 & 13, I suggest you replace 'that' with 'who' in both.....and, in the last Stanza, I think you must mean 'miles'........

    That being said.........I now must say.....This is some good reading.......consciousness infused pulp(absolutely no offense....a high compliment, be assured).......good show..........

  • 17 years ago

    by Xx TEARS OF A REJECT xX

    Dang! thats deep1 awesome!

  • 17 years ago

    by Nyx

    Hey well done i like this line-(You can't dance in the rain when
    nobody cares about the beauty of a
    sobbing sky)nice imagry and the way u use ur words makes me see what u feel.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jason Rainey

    Wow! Thats amazing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Sungrl And Mrs Whatsit

    Having just reread this....I really have to say....
    Amazing and moving and so well-written....
    and it's pouring rain right here right now so......