I really really liked your poem, it was amazing, the rhymes the way it was set up the comparison to the butterflies all of it just amazing...keep up the awsome work
pls comment on my poem as well...Storm of grief..thnx
I like so liked your poem. The best thing about it was the flow, really nice.....
I'm so happy that you can write poems on this this site and get comments too! It's fun!
Your a really good writer, you keep writing and I'll keep reading!
I am a vampire.....
"The pain, it hurts, I dont know why
The butterflies fly free and not I
I forced to live with shackled feet,
My wings you break, my back you beat," this is my fave part of the whole poem you write very well keep it up and i will keep up the comments
Wow. VERY good. One of the most cliche topics and you made it non-cliche. I'm very proud of you.
This was beautiful in a dark way and I loved it. I'm sorry, I seem to be at loss for words.
Because of these two poems you're going on my favorites; feel special. =] I'll comment [or at least read and vote] on any poems you post. Keep me interested. =]
For your age, that was ok. I'll be honest and say it was on an overused subject, and although there was the occasional overused description in there, I have read a lot worse.
The basic ideas, and some words such as "shackled feet" were very good. Like I said, for your age it was good. Keep writing.
Wow. This was AMAZING. It flowed really well & everything was so perfect. Nothing seemed forced at all. It was such a cliche topic, but you wrote it so well, so different. Very creative & unique. I loved that. & The imagery was really good, too. The wording was awesome! Good vocab. as well.
The pain, its gone, into the sky
The butterflies fly free and so do I
Wings pure white, I do not miss
That life I led, for I got my wish.