Safe

by Michelle   Jan 28, 2007


Falling in and out I can't help but wonder what may or may not be
I'll hide my thoughts till the area is clear
And safe to emerge into the open, careful not to disclose
What my mind holds and what you could discern

It seems that, thus far,
my trust in you has not proven deadly
That your loyalty would come fatal to you
Before me.
But I must take precautions, I must conceal my words
I don't even know if what I carry is
truly what I think I hold.

Time and time again my knowledge has declared itself mistaken
I have broken my own heart through
false impressions and misplaced emotion
My hands have been known to drop their pens
And wrongly pick up those which have
no insight or meaning as to what I feel

A broken heart is, ultimately,
what scares me
But is it mine, or yours, that I am so afraid of?
To lose your thoughts and
precious reflections on your soul
Would prove fatal to me,
but what could it do to you?

It could shatter your spine into a million peices
of which I could not put back together
It could cut you in half and bring forward the waters
which you have only bore
When the most brutal of beatings established themselves onto your heart.
It could kill you,
and all that I love in you,
and what you mean to me.

I choose to protect you, to save you
As you have so many times promised
Though you'll never know how I have kept you from
such a battered heart and
Broken trust born from a dying dream
I know you would do the same for me.

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  • 17 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    This is a bit confuzing, the long sentences lead the reader into a thought then rip them away at the next. Perhaps that was the point.

    {4/5}

    [PygmyPuff]

  • 17 years ago

    by ellewen

    Wow, your vocabulary is what amazes me most. I love it! It's full of wonderous emotion. But honestly, looking at them it kinda overwhealmed me. The length down the page, as well as length of your lines is enough to keep many from reading it. I noticed that people don't read mine if they are long as well. I suggest breaking down the lines, they are extremely long. My favorite line happened to be

    "I don't even know if what I carry is truly what I think I hold"

    That line is awesome. The thing I didn't like was how it didn't flow ery well, or have much rhythm. I was often thrown off. Though your vocabulary is good, I think you overuse some of it. It's kinda like trying to read shakespear for the first time (for most people, there are ecceptions) You have to think about it really hard to get something out of it at the first read. But in all I found it enjoyable .I noticed in the forum you were wondering why people woulndt comment. So I decided to answer.

    peace

    skittz

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