Aww well penned! flow was okay for me. I love the title of the poem! Uhm to improve this I would suggest you to use punctuations because a poem without a punctuation is like a song without a tune. :) but overall it was great.
Hmm...I thought this one could've been better. I didn't like the flow much. It seemed really rocky. Not so much at the beginning, but near the end it started to get worse. Just watch the flow throughout the whole poem. =) 4/5 xoxo