I wish i was a star

by firexdancer   Jan 29, 2007

I wish i was a star
so beautiful and bright
because when you were gone
i could touch you with my light

if i was a star
i could reach you in your dreams
and hold you in the darkness
my tears running down your face in streams

cause if i was a star
you'd see me in the dark
and smile in my starshine
and i could rekindle your spark


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  • 10 years ago

    by Kyrodo

    Kyri can definitely relate to this one ^^ (Kyri wishes wings to fly though xP). It was sweet and majestic, simple but powerful.

  • 11 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Aww well penned! flow was okay for me. I love the title of the poem! Uhm to improve this I would suggest you to use punctuations because a poem without a punctuation is like a song without a tune. :) but overall it was great.

  • 11 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Hmm...I thought this one could've been better. I didn't like the flow much. It seemed really rocky. Not so much at the beginning, but near the end it started to get worse. Just watch the flow throughout the whole poem. =) 4/5 xoxo


  • 11 years ago

    by lost in lovee

    Ohhh that was so good! short but i loved it!!!!! 5/5 xD

  • 11 years ago

    by Just Lucy

    Oooohh wow, so beautiful! thats fantastic, i love how your mind works, these poems look like you didnt need the effort and that is a good thing!

    xoxo Lucy

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