That was quite beautiful.
The idea of being a star to be closer to someone was great, and very touching.
Obviously it still needs work, all all poems do. But it was good.
Some suggestions - use more punctuation, and the last line of the second stanza had a flow issue.
Good write though. If you keep writing and improving, your work will be quite impressive!!
Hmm...I thought this one could've been better. I didn't like the flow much. It seemed really rocky. Not so much at the beginning, but near the end it started to get worse. Just watch the flow throughout the whole poem. =) 4/5 xoxo
Aww well penned! flow was okay for me. I love the title of the poem! Uhm to improve this I would suggest you to use punctuations because a poem without a punctuation is like a song without a tune. :) but overall it was great.