I like the metaphor theme, yea that was defininatly excellent

Awwwwwwwwwwwww........... Thats really good! Loved this one, your a fantasic writer! Keep it up!!!!! :)

This was simply beautiful. I really loved it. you seem really good at expressing yourself Gabriella :)
take care,
Marjan

Well written and thanks forthe coments i really apritiate them

I loved the first stanza... it's beautifully penned. As a whole it's a terrific poem. 5/5

marcella

The last para was the best! i loved it. i will read more soon. i am adding you to my favourites. hope you do the same. your style of writing is wonderful to read.

and if they are all this good you will be getting a lot of 5s.

5/5 david

That was quite beautiful.
The idea of being a star to be closer to someone was great, and very touching.
Obviously it still needs work, all all poems do. But it was good.
Some suggestions - use more punctuation, and the last line of the second stanza had a flow issue.
Good write though. If you keep writing and improving, your work will be quite impressive!!

Great poem easy read i like the style sorry this is short i am in a hurry i will check back later great great great

This is so cute. nice work sweetie 5/5

Oooohh wow, so beautiful! thats fantastic, i love how your mind works, these poems look like you didnt need the effort and that is a good thing!

xoxo Lucy

Ohhh that was so good! short but i loved it!!!!! 5/5 xD

Hmm...I thought this one could've been better. I didn't like the flow much. It seemed really rocky. Not so much at the beginning, but near the end it started to get worse. Just watch the flow throughout the whole poem. =) 4/5 xoxo

Samantha

Aww well penned! flow was okay for me. I love the title of the poem! Uhm to improve this I would suggest you to use punctuations because a poem without a punctuation is like a song without a tune. :) but overall it was great.

Kyri can definitely relate to this one ^^ (Kyri wishes wings to fly though xP). It was sweet and majestic, simple but powerful.