Comments : Sailing like a boat

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wow! again with the wonderful descritptions and strong emotions... definitly my favorite of the 4 i have read!

  • 17 years ago

    by blindedxxbyxxlove

    Beautifully written. Dark yet you made your point across in a lovely way...your a very talented writer, so keep it up!
    ~jenifer~

  • 17 years ago

    by Zach Armitage

    Dark. depressing, but really well written. youve managed to catch the emotion excelently. congrats

  • 17 years ago

    by xX-jess-Xx

    Its sad but really makes you think. I really liked it!
    although, id watch out for

    "my heart is pounding a minute"

    because it doesnt really make sense (but that mite just be me!! :s) i wasnt sure if u meant ur heart was pounding just for a moment, or if it was pounding fast!

    neways other than that i absolutely loved it!

    xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Kit Kat Katie

    I liked the first few stanzas for the form. You made your first point in 5 lines, and went to 4. Then you made a Dramatic change of words in your second 5 line stanza, but you seemed like you got tired of writing and just threw some words together in a few lines so you could end it. It was still good meaning though

  • 17 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    Very good poem. You are a very gifted writer. 5/5
    -Vino

    Keep up the good work