"Lifeless and frozen
They burn through the armor
And freeze our hearts
Killing everything between us"
--My all time favorite verse. Awesome.
"They will never be anything more
But frozen daggers"
--To be picky, I'd say you should change 'but' to 'than'. But, that's to be picky. You do as you wish, love.
"I can suture these wounds
But nothing can stop the pain"
--I LOVE these lines.
--Silly p&q screwed your text. : (.
And, as another Sarah pickyness thing, I'd suggest putting your comments under your signature, because where it is sort of looks like it's supposed to be part of the poem. or maybe even just double space...[you also have the option of paying no mind to my dumb criticism ;)].
Well now that all of that is said, I just want to remind you that you're a freakin' fantastic writer. People that write like you, I find intriguing. You say you weren't even feeling like this, yet you wrote it as if it were the only thing you could feel. I love it. You're awesome, hun. I love you.