Comments : Black

  • 10 years ago

    by Jordan Cross

    I like it a lot.....it a good poem(this isnt Jordan cross, its her friend by the way) it sounds like something i would write.......i think you should do more of this styal because you seem to have a talent in it

  • 10 years ago

    by natalie

    Lol im kinda in love with your poems!! Lol
    put moree on!! i wanna read more!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    I liked the poem. The title of the poem should have been something different though. It didn't seem to match the rest of the flow of the poem. I think that it's an awesome poem.

    5/5

    Such a great poem. So many points to make, yet you still know all of them. They are amazing. This is really good. Love it!

  • 10 years ago

    by Wild Child

    Loved Reading This Poem. A Very marvelous, grim piece. Beautifully Done..Ty for your comments as well. :) 5/5.

  • 10 years ago

    by Jason

    An eceptional piece Double D. When I saw the title I though this would a poem decribing a color. Instead you show us what you see when you gaze into the void. Wonderful work.

    Keep it up
    Jason.

  • 10 years ago

    by Hannah Emellia

    Hmmm. I like it. A poem wonderfully written, truly deserving a 5.

  • 10 years ago

    by Jeremy B

    I see a lil Linkin Park, Disturbed, and Mudvayne in this....hmm, wonder what new musical mastermind will come from these lyrics....i liked it

  • 10 years ago

    by sibyllene

    Interesting poem. there are several grammatical things that i could point out, if you're looking for that kind of critique. just let me know

  • 10 years ago

    by Fluffy

    "Every new Skrying moment, looking threw the scope,
    Glancing over you're shoulder for a slight chance of some hope,
    I feel that all these thoughts make me deranged,
    Paranoia isn't something thats easily tamed,
    Just my little mystical perception I keep,
    Shudder at the hearing of the horror from the deep"

    ^You are without a doubt a powerful writer. You have a strong sense of rhythm, and arguably, its standard rises next to something by Muse (which makes the poem SO much cooler :]). Anyway, you use extended vocabulary which inevitably enhances the piece as a whole; you've constructed a strong and engaging piece. Well done Eric and keep it up :].x

  • 10 years ago

    by Bethany

    Awesome poem!! i loved it!!

  • 10 years ago

    by in spite of love

    Wow, you're great, yo. ^-^ this poem was originally going to be like a 4.... but then I read...I feel that all these thoughts make me deranged,
    Paranoia isn't something thats easily tamed,
    Just my little mystical perception I keep,
    Shudder at the hearing of the horror from the deep
    Someday the tainted life style will fade,
    And we can all Stop living a charade,

    And now, I think it deserves more. ^-^ SSo, 5/5 hun.

    =] Peace, yo.

  • 10 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    A very thought provoking, and well written dark poem

  • 10 years ago

    by Briana

    Nice, man. Nice. :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I loved this!!
    The wording was a pleasure to read and the imagery was fantastic.
    You really did a wonderful job on this.

  • 10 years ago

    by Cindy

    Excellent poem! Very deep feelings. Great! Take care Cindy

  • 10 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    This feels a lot like a rap and very wonderful at that! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by luna bella

    Great job this deserves 10/5 i loved it

  • 10 years ago

    by Alessandro

    Awesome thanks for comment.. this is a good poem.. keep it up.

  • 10 years ago

    by Erin

    Love this poem very deeep .....keep up the good work

  • 10 years ago

    by I Miss Him

    I loved it...so deep and dark...5/5