Whoa
Amazing Story
Sad
but what i loved the most
was the rhyme scheme you used
great job
5/5

This poem was really well written. I thought it was beautifully penned. Great write even better read. Well done ~mel

This was a nice write, but it confused me alot with weather this was meant to be a rhyming piece or not, because it picked up and left it in places. But this was tonnes emotional, and it has a real good message conveyed.
kaitlynx.

Great job...although a couple spelling/ grammar mistakes...2nd stanza, on should be no and you used the word beloved, I think you are pronouncing it wrong, but I could be mistaken, you might try and change it to... "The loss of her true love" or "The loss of someone she loved" Someting like that...so it contnues to rhyme with the previous line. Great job though 5/5 - Unattractive1

On one cared, = no one cared,
(sp)

she cried for her loss,
and her leaving,
from heaven above,
the loss of her beloved

=

to keep with the flow, you need to add four more lines...

here in world, = in what world? This world? That world? Your world?

The poem wasn't all that good, m'dear. Yes, it was touching, but only the content. The content of a poem is not nearly as important as the spelling... and grammar.

This poem... it seems jumpy. It seemed like you jumped around a lot, talking about one thing on moment and another thing another moment...

It's kind of hard to explain.

I'm sorry m'dear, but this didn't hit the spot.

4/5
~Stephen White

Aww good job! on this one! I love it :) i'll give it a 5/5! keep writting! :)

TC

There were multiple amout of different rhyme schemes that made the poem kinda messy. Flow was a lot better. But the rhyme scheme of diffrent techniques threw it off.
Very sad and great poem! God Bless 5/5
<3Tay(^_^)

Awh. Sad, but amazing poem. I could imagine her almost perfectly. I think that capitilzation and puncutuation are important, maybe work on that?? Just my thoughts. Keep up the good work, though.

It's a well penned poem..though sad..Excellent peice..though the rhymes creatd a lil problem...the flow was good n...in short...i can surely give u a 5/5...Kp up de good wrk!
xxPoojaxx

I'm guessing that

"on one cared,"

was really meant to say

"No one cared,"

The word scheme was different, but I liked it.

A powerful and emotional poem. I liked how you started it.

Keep writing, and keep posting. =)
5/5
~Ally~

I liked this one. It was poerful and emotional, i liked the flow and the words you used. penned very well.
love Tara-Kay
xxxx

'on one cared,'
^^meant to be 'no one cared'...i think =]
the poem is so small and simple but its got an in depth and deep meaning...i like it! your style of writing is related in mine...thats maybe why i enjoy your work! =] keep it up..youve joint my favz!
nuff luv xx

I love the second stanza. the flow was perfect, 5/5. i loved it. ur very talented

This poem has a great message. The flow was great, the word choice wonderful, and it all came together very nicely. I gave it a 5/5.

Great flow and emotion. There's great depth in this piece. The rhyme scheme was strange but I liked it. Good write. 5/5

marcella

Great poem
very well done
i like the fallen angel theme
tis always a good theme to a poem
the last stanza has a touch to a bad flow but that is all
good job
pleasure reading it:D:D

keenan

Excellent 5/5 from me!!!