Comments : Thank god

  • 17 years ago

    by tryinXtoXholdXmyXheadXup

    I need held with this one i am going to send in to Jacks Platoon but i want it to be perfect. thank you

  • 17 years ago

    by Independence Forever

    Your paicng was pushed with badge and acknowledge but other than that it had good pacing and i liked the war and corps rhyme alot. a good poem with a clear message. most people bash the war and those who fight in it but a brave few stand behind them

    your servant:
    david

  • 17 years ago

    by Kristina

    Well this one wasn't as good as your other ones. The rhyming was forced in it and it threw the flow off. But the poem it's self and what it was about was good! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 17 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    Aww this was cool! keep it up bub

    much love and many kisses,
    bex

  • 17 years ago

    by firexdancer

    The world is so cold
    To hold it alone
    I am too bold
    I turn to face this world of stone

    i don't think this has as good flow as your others but this is my favorite part! it is still a very good poem,
    luv gabriella

  • 17 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    The world is so cold
    To hold it alone
    I am too bold
    I turn to face this world of stone

    what a interesting thing that i liked the same part of poem,i was really amazed when i saw,anyway the flow and wording is really great

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    This was my favorite part...

    "I walk to the street
    Watching out for my band of brothers
    This is not an easy feat
    Fighting for others"

    It flowed really nice. 5/5

    marcella

  • 17 years ago

    by umbra

    The very short lines made it seem a bit jagged, but the point you are making is a good one. Those who serve the public with their very lives deserve our admiration, not scorn.

  • 17 years ago

    by Hurtingsoul

    There is fear within
    Held captive and cold
    I face the world with a grin
    Someone had to be bold

    my favorite stanza and i feel you i got 2 cuzins in the marines