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  • 17 years ago

    by Angel Of Death

    Aww! i love this poem, you rock! i love all your poems, don't stop writing!
    xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Kalee

    THIS IS A GREAT POEM David. I loved it. and u r not a fake. You are a great poet. keep up the good writing.
    5/5

    Kalee

  • 17 years ago

    by Static

    Hey dave! another great one. Although id rather see you being happy and writing on the positive side of things u poetry always has this feel like its drawing you in when its somber. Cant help but read faster and faster as i go :P And btw your as real as i am... hope thats a good thing :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Perfection

    Yes this was a very good poem with deep meaning and emotion. I think meny can find themselves in this.

    Good job keep up =)

  • 17 years ago

    by Hebe

    Hey!
    A great poem again, but sad.
    I like the words you've chosen.
    good work! Keep it up
    Hebe

  • 17 years ago

    by LithiumSacrifice

    Awe. =[ tis sad.. 5/5 excellent poem..

  • 17 years ago

    by firexdancer

    This is another gorgeous one, youre in my favorites! never stop writing,
    5/5
    luv gabriella

  • 17 years ago

    by Annabel

    So why begin, What you can't end ... it's great, emotional stuff - i love it !

  • 17 years ago

    by Fredy

    Wow, your poems are so alive, they speak for themselves and for you; you are great poet.

  • 17 years ago

    by Kaila

    Awww David....This was so sad!!! I loved it! The emotion was absolutly amazing! You are such a great poet...And you know I'm always here for you this is so great one of your best poems for sure!!! I loved this and I love you lol
    Kaila

  • 17 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    This really is sad and depressing. Still a great write nonetheless. The last stanza was my favorite. The whole poem had a nice flow though. 5/5

    marcella

  • Good poem. Very sad and depressing. It had a nice flow. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Mousie

    Wow the last stanza is very powerful. it didn't really flow all that well, but i liked it, but b/c it was choppy i gave you a 4... you deserve more like a 4.5, but they don't have those unfortunately. nice job though, keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by Jochsey

    That was very well written. I have to agree with james tho its a little sad seeing you write like like this tho instead of about happy things but it was still very good. Oh and your not fake your as real as we all are. Unless we are all fake as well :S.

    Andrew

  • 17 years ago

    by Willow

    I can kinda relate to this poem. it's well written and i give it 5/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by InterviewWithTheKat

    A very somber poems. well written though! i lkie it a lot!!
    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Kristina

    Wow, short lines but it was very powerful! i can relate to this. sad, but brilliant poem! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 17 years ago

    by Just Lucy

    Awww that is so heartfelt and deep!! i loved the scond last stanza, it reali put a meaning to the poem!! great work and great poem, 5/5 from me!!

    xoxo Lucy

  • 17 years ago

    by xPerfect Chaosx

    These were my favorite lines:

    So why begin
    What you cant end

    and

    So on this night
    I lie awake
    I see clearly now
    I am a fake

    Those are awesome lines.. they just flow so well.. I love this poem.. it's wonderful. Emotional.. and rythmic.. great job!!!! 5/5 as always my friend
    Much Love,
    .:Danielle:.