Wonderful write with so much emotion. There are a lot of minor mistakes, I encourage you to re-read your writings for most of them have small errors within. Other than that, this was an amazing write with such heartfelt wording. Great Job.
These lines, "Your everywhere to me" and "But your everything I want to see" and "Your always so happy" you used the wrong "your" it should be "you're"
This line, "I hear your voice and your not there" should be, "I hear your voice and you're not there"
These lines, "And now were together" and "Now were having problems" and "Now were here talking" you used the wrong "were" it should be "we're" for were is a place, and we're means we are.
In this line, "Every thing's going great" the words "Every thing's" should be combined to make one word "Everything's"
This line, "Is so great and so true" I felt would rhyme better if you changed it to this, "Is so great and true"
This line, "Sitting her hand in hand" I don't think you meant "her" I believe you meant to use the word "here"
This line, "This love of ours wont end" you need an apostraphy on the "wont" so it reads "won't"
This line, "But for me it's a hard task" I believe you meant, "But for me it's a hard to ask"