My own fate

You won me over at the very end. That's a great closing line

I think this poem would be better if the first 3 stanzas hadn't suggested perfect rhyming. It was hard to find the flow after that. Maybe this is exactly what you wanted...in which case you shouldn't take into consideration what I've said. Though I really do appreciate the content and message. I think it's a very beautiful piece, short and to the point. I enjoyed this. Nice job.

-Rolo :]

Short to the point write. I liked the rhyme and the flow of the poem. Well written for such a short write, at first I was skeptical that it was going to be too short, but you ended this very nicely not leaving it up in the air like many short poems. Nice write!

Peace, Joe

I liked this and it's very relatable. The ending stanza was by far my favorite it summed up the poem very nicely. Nice job
5/5

That was nice. The image was great. But the rhyming was forced, and the flow was a little off. I still like it a lot, but it could have been better. Good job though.