Hey, Really enjoyed this poem. I have to day i loved the repition of the words "'m Ready" and the fact that in the end it changes tense to say "i was ready". This really brings out effect and it showed great talent. Thought maybe its just me but i though that you should of put the last line on a new stanza. It would of been even more effective. Anyways the flow was good, a good usage of words throughtout. I like your rhyme pattern, and to improve i suggest you use punctuation. I odnt know maybe thats just me. Anywyas a very enjoyable read, and thanks for your comments! xx
Mind boggling. You really creat an image. You chose a very good vocabulary for this. Your rhyming scheme changed throughout the poem I noticed. Intresting. You flow was great. You did a really great job at this I agree with MY1&only I liked this stanza:
Cried so many times to release my pain
Fought back with a million ways
But now I'm stronger enough to be insane
Fear of me when I will be ready
This poem is excellently written and filled with meaning. It really gives the reader an image of a fight with nature. I'm not exactly sure what the fight is for, but mystery is an important part of poetry. The last line is the only part that could use improvement.
Hey It's batman from the discussion thingy ''I Hate Annoying People.'' I love reading peoms and I too have a friendship problem. But the funny thing is, no matter how much i hate her, or want her to fall of the face of the earth, I really miss the frindship we had and all those good times, Ya know? So if anything is ruff just think of the good times, its whats helping me get through. And by the way, I love you peom, its rhyming but it has awsome points and alot of big words. Lol. Well I think you have an ah-mazing talent. Dont give up.
Aww. I like this poem. In a way it's sad. But in another way it has a power that just looms over you when you're done reading it. I love having that feeling after reading something lol.
The flow seemed pretty good for the most part. There were a few lines that are a bit rocky, but no one's perfect. I liked the anger in this poem. It seemed great for it. And when you're angry, I KNOW you can write better poems. =P I know cuz it's happened to me lol. But it's a good thing. =) 5/5 xoxo
It was good.
Different, I liked that about it.
It had a personal storey to it, I could tell that.
I thought the flow could use a little work because it became hard to read in areas but other than that, perfecto.
Wow...amazing...i loved this one laura..
i dunno..wen i was reading it had a great flow..
i think u might have a mistake though...
"But now I'm stronger enough to be insane"
i think it should be "But now I'm strong enough to be insane"
well..another 5/5 from me =)