Comments : I'm Ready

  • 10 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Hey, Really enjoyed this poem. I have to day i loved the repition of the words "'m Ready" and the fact that in the end it changes tense to say "i was ready". This really brings out effect and it showed great talent. Thought maybe its just me but i though that you should of put the last line on a new stanza. It would of been even more effective. Anyways the flow was good, a good usage of words throughtout. I like your rhyme pattern, and to improve i suggest you use punctuation. I odnt know maybe thats just me. Anywyas a very enjoyable read, and thanks for your comments! xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Amazing.
    I agree, I loved the way you changed the past tense of I'm Ready in the end, made it stronger. Fantastic wording and the flow was good. Overall, well done! Keep it up! 5/5

    Stephanie Lynn .+.

  • 10 years ago

    by BeautifulxMess

    Very use of strong words. This is a great poem! I really liked how you just
    express everything. Great job!
    God Bless 5/5
    <3Tayyy

  • 10 years ago

    by Annabel

    This comes out very powerful, i love your choice of words very well done, i'll be sure to vote 5/5 xxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    Mind boggling. You really creat an image. You chose a very good vocabulary for this. Your rhyming scheme changed throughout the poem I noticed. Intresting. You flow was great. You did a really great job at this I agree with MY1&only I liked this stanza:

    Cried so many times to release my pain
    Fought back with a million ways
    But now I'm stronger enough to be insane
    Fear of me when I will be ready

    Great Write

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Idiosyncratic

    This poem is excellently written and filled with meaning. It really gives the reader an image of a fight with nature. I'm not exactly sure what the fight is for, but mystery is an important part of poetry. The last line is the only part that could use improvement.

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Cherish

    Wow thats really good! :D i feel really inspired :) thanks for looking at my poems by the way
    keep up the great work
    cherish xxx :D

  • 10 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    I like the suspense the poem holds. Great poem!

  • 10 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    I loved the imagery the words created and I loved the way you ended every stanza with "I'm ready". It reminds the ready that you truly are ready. great job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Civil Hatori

    This poem has such force, I really enjoyed it :D. I agree with Karl wild, you had a great ending. 5/5!

  • 10 years ago

    by Jessie

    It's a good poem, but hatred will only lead to bitterness towards the world. Keep writing!

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  • 10 years ago

    by lost in lovee

    Wow! that was a GREAT poem! i could really feel the emotion! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I LOVED this!
    The imagery used in this was breathtaking, the flow was flawless, the wording perfect.
    I adore this poem, you did a beautiful job with this!

  • 10 years ago

    by Batman

    Hey It's batman from the discussion thingy ''I Hate Annoying People.'' I love reading peoms and I too have a friendship problem. But the funny thing is, no matter how much i hate her, or want her to fall of the face of the earth, I really miss the frindship we had and all those good times, Ya know? So if anything is ruff just think of the good times, its whats helping me get through. And by the way, I love you peom, its rhyming but it has awsome points and alot of big words. Lol. Well I think you have an ah-mazing talent. Dont give up.

  • 10 years ago

    by fvalconbridge

    Omg, that was so like amazing! i'm gunna add you to my fav's. I'm sorry but my computer won't let me read some of your poems. but i tried. this one's 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by SmileeItsBritt

    This is really good, i can relate a lot! Nicely written!

  • 10 years ago

    by twisted reality

    Aww. I like this poem. In a way it's sad. But in another way it has a power that just looms over you when you're done reading it. I love having that feeling after reading something lol.

    The flow seemed pretty good for the most part. There were a few lines that are a bit rocky, but no one's perfect. I liked the anger in this poem. It seemed great for it. And when you're angry, I KNOW you can write better poems. =P I know cuz it's happened to me lol. But it's a good thing. =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 10 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    It was good.
    Different, I liked that about it.
    It had a personal storey to it, I could tell that.
    I thought the flow could use a little work because it became hard to read in areas but other than that, perfecto.

  • 10 years ago

    by KaKaSHi

    Wow...amazing...i loved this one laura..
    i dunno..wen i was reading it had a great flow..
    i think u might have a mistake though...
    "But now I'm stronger enough to be insane"
    i think it should be "But now I'm strong enough to be insane"
    well..another 5/5 from me =)

  • 10 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Wow!!,...this one's beautiful
    I t had an excellent flow n the choice of words was simple ...and the poem was well penned..
    Good job!
    =)
    xxPoojaxx