This was just so beautiful!
The imagery you used created vivid pictures, and I thought the whole piece flowed very well.
The wording was beautiful, and the first stanza really pulled me in.
You did a wonderful job.
Well I liked the main theme of this poem. It has a very strong meaning and a very good point to it. But the problem I found was that your rhyme scheme was all over the place. In the first stanza I found that it was legible and there were rhymes where you had put them (aabb). Then in the second stanza, you rhymed 'hear' with 'happily.' And that's not rhyming. It goes on into the third and fourth stanza that you switched rhyming schemes around. If you're going to rhyme, rhyme throughout the whole poem and not just whatever comes to your head. It's confusing, and since I didn't quite understand it the first time I read it, I had to read it again. Please don't take this personally. I am just giving some honest advice. =) 4/5 xoxo
Very touching. I dont neccessarily like the mixed up rhyming scheme. or is this free verse? I don't know, but I did enjoy this poem. I loved how you wrote the last line in each stanza. Very sweet and effective. 5/5