I liked the reptition of "My Death Won't Be In Vein" in this poem. I loved the last staza of the entire poem, i think it sums everything up really nicely and works so well. Thevocabulary you used was really great, i liked the "Pearl Black Eyes" it creates good imagery. But you know if you do die, it acctually will be in vein. Thanks again for your comment on right then right there. Take care xx
Wow I really liked this poem as well, such a creative story line to this poem. What I liked the most was the dark angel trying to steal the eyes of a young soul. What I really liked was how you showed the angel getting angry while the person in the poem still grasped on and denyed it access to the person who's eyes were black as night. AMAZING! No other word to describe it. You have a gret touch when it comes to dark poems keep it up.