Comments : My Death Won't Be In Vain

  • 10 years ago

    by InterviewWithTheKat

    That is such a cool poem!!!
    i love the sound of thoses eyes!
    thats some very talented writing!
    keep it up!!!
    5/5
    kat-x-

  • 10 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    *,,Great poem. Very powerful. Excellent rhyming, was a little choppy in some places though. But overall it was very well done.
    Keep it up && Thanks for the comment,,*

  • 10 years ago

    by Nick who Plays Pool

    5/5 very deep poem.

  • 10 years ago

    by StormyStar

    I love how you put so much of love in this, how you show that you love her, is this like saaying something about someone like is there really a girl? she sounds lucky..

  • 10 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    I liked the reptition of "My Death Won't Be In Vein" in this poem. I loved the last staza of the entire poem, i think it sums everything up really nicely and works so well. Thevocabulary you used was really great, i liked the "Pearl Black Eyes" it creates good imagery. But you know if you do die, it acctually will be in vein. Thanks again for your comment on right then right there. Take care xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Alison

    Wonderful 5/5. its great, that girl is really lucky =]

  • 10 years ago

    by BeautifulDisaster

    Im not sure if i like how is isnt stanzaed.... but the wording is good but the flow could use some work....

  • 10 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    I like the repitition, however some of the rhyming seems a bit forced. Just work on that.

  • 10 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Tht's a great write!...beautifully penned!...good choice of words!The repetition gave the poem a good effect!..lovely Poem filled with love!...Kp it up!
    xxPoojaxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Maisie Martin

    There'sn a ton of voice in this poem; nalmost like I can hear you saying it. the rhythm throughout is something unique, and I like it. amazing work. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I loved the repeation, although some of the rhyming seemed a little forced to me. Excellent word choice dripping with heartfelt emtions. Again you have done a brillant job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Fsams

    Wow outstanding. Really lovable piece how beautifully the feelings are expressed, I am really impressed. V true words of love. 5/5 u deserve. smile 4 me by checkin out my 'fart is an art'

  • 10 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow I really liked this poem as well, such a creative story line to this poem. What I liked the most was the dark angel trying to steal the eyes of a young soul. What I really liked was how you showed the angel getting angry while the person in the poem still grasped on and denyed it access to the person who's eyes were black as night. AMAZING! No other word to describe it. You have a gret touch when it comes to dark poems keep it up.