Comments : Was It Love?

  • 10 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Wow, this was breathtaking, you can see the poem clearly in your mind as you read it, it was beautiful, so sweet, and so sad. 5/5
    luv gabriella

  • 10 years ago

    by Kaila

    Ok I thought the layout was odd and i wish it flowed better but the message i loved and can totally relate to it! you did a good job on this poem keep it up

  • 10 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    Aw. This was so sad.. But very beautifully written. It didn't flow as well as it could have.. but wow, that story just really touched me.

    This is just absolutely amazing, dear.. The amount of emotions in this, just wow.. Happiness, sadness, anger, hurt, pain.. All put into one.

    Amazingly penned, hunny.

    Bri [x]

  • 10 years ago

    by Darien

    Ok, so this was a really long.. story. To be honest, this didn't really seem like a poem at all. There was dialoge, and descrpitve language, much like a story. So this really did make a good story, it had a good ending, sort of makes the reader curious. Umm, ok so I liked this as a story, but not as a poem, so I'll just pretend I'm voting for it as a story.

  • 10 years ago

    by fvalconbridge

    Can I just say that was amazing! 5/5. It was a little long but everything you said seemed relivetna and was said in a heart felt way. I loved the bit when you said: "His love whispers.
    Dont try to change my mind, its over,
    His love says as she slowly walks away." that was my fav bit and i lloved the ending. Really 5/5

    x

  • 10 years ago

    by PygmyPuff

    I like the theme behind this, as many people can relate. My only concern is the length, it seems to drag on. Also the form is a bit weak as it goes on, as though it is losing the flame.

    {4/5}

    [PygmyPuff]

  • 10 years ago

    by Meet Me On Thames Street

    This poem is amazing, the story is beautiful and so heartfelt, i could just feel the emotion in it. The flow could have been better but it was still great.

    Loved It!! 5/5

    ~Nicole~

  • 10 years ago

    by azii

    Great job! My fav part was:

    She sees him walking up,
    So she hurries and dries her eyes.
    He asks her whats wrong,
    He asks her why she was crying.
    So beautifully written!
    Keep up the great work! :)

    take care

  • 10 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    This was so beautiful! Yet so sad... The only thing you can do is put " and ' in because without it .. it just makes things confusing... Also at the part they yell.. put a ! and parts they whisper put ... k? Mucha betta! Overall this poem was beautiful I enjoyed reading it very much. This was my favorite part:

    She says she doesnt understand,
    Why they couldnt just take a break.
    She tells him she doesnt want to feel,
    Like all she was, is a mistake.

    Great Write
    Tres Bien!

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by J Lau

    Great write. I must admit it was quite confusing in the beginning... I had to read it a couple of times before getting everything straight and flowing. I think a lot of people can relate to your poem... or at least I can. If we all can have our ways or that if life / love is as easy, we may not treasure love as much as we do. Great write. Keep up the good work! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Curry

    This is a really good poem. good job and never stop writing poems!

  • 10 years ago

    by BeautifulDisaster

    This is more like a story to me, but it is an amazing write. kinda confusing but brilliant!

  • 10 years ago

    by PURE HEART

    Nice story penned thru ur words...........good write

    luv

  • 10 years ago

    by Nicole

    This is the one about me

  • 10 years ago

    by Hey Brittknee

    Wow
    i think this has to be one of my new favorite poems..i think that says enough

    it was like a story amazing job

    im adding you to my favorites =]

    brittany (MD)

  • 10 years ago

    by Kaila

    Now this one so far is your best poem ever!!! I loved it and I can so relate to it and Woww!!!! It was tremendous!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow this was my favorite poem definatly.. really long but you managed to capture my attention until the very end. Love is such a complex game that people play and it never gets easier, especialy when confusion is involved. The last stanza was my favorite one by far. cause it makes you think bout love in general and what it really is.. nice job. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Vanessa

    This was really amazing, truley wonderfully written. It was quite long, but it keept me intrested all the way though it. the word choice was excellent, the flow was flawless, and the emtions were deep and strong. this is by far the best poem that I have read al day long. 5/5 although you clearly deserve more.