Ok, so this was a really long.. story. To be honest, this didn't really seem like a poem at all. There was dialoge, and descrpitve language, much like a story. So this really did make a good story, it had a good ending, sort of makes the reader curious. Umm, ok so I liked this as a story, but not as a poem, so I'll just pretend I'm voting for it as a story.
Can I just say that was amazing! 5/5. It was a little long but everything you said seemed relivetna and was said in a heart felt way. I loved the bit when you said: "His love whispers.
Dont try to change my mind, its over,
His love says as she slowly walks away." that was my fav bit and i lloved the ending. Really 5/5
This was so beautiful! Yet so sad... The only thing you can do is put " and ' in because without it .. it just makes things confusing... Also at the part they yell.. put a ! and parts they whisper put ... k? Mucha betta! Overall this poem was beautiful I enjoyed reading it very much. This was my favorite part:
She says she doesnt understand,
Why they couldnt just take a break.
She tells him she doesnt want to feel,
Like all she was, is a mistake.
Great write. I must admit it was quite confusing in the beginning... I had to read it a couple of times before getting everything straight and flowing. I think a lot of people can relate to your poem... or at least I can. If we all can have our ways or that if life / love is as easy, we may not treasure love as much as we do. Great write. Keep up the good work! 5/5
Wow this was my favorite poem definatly.. really long but you managed to capture my attention until the very end. Love is such a complex game that people play and it never gets easier, especialy when confusion is involved. The last stanza was my favorite one by far. cause it makes you think bout love in general and what it really is.. nice job. 5/5
This was really amazing, truley wonderfully written. It was quite long, but it keept me intrested all the way though it. the word choice was excellent, the flow was flawless, and the emtions were deep and strong. this is by far the best poem that I have read al day long. 5/5 although you clearly deserve more.