I definetely think it should stay in the poems about life part, by the way, it was beautiful, the description of the flower growing, and it's pain as it dies from neglection. 5/5
gabriella

Good wording and flow i really say that there isn't anything problem with the poem
So don't worry if you worry about it
And you have a talent,i will read more of your work
Keep it up
LAURA

It seems that your favourite word is crimson. i like it too, very descriptive word. has a hidden meaning. i love this poem too. all of it! bravo!

5/5 David

Wow nice words!! They worked excellently in this poem! you did a great job!

My favorite line is "The rose turns to black as it wilts in despair,
For time has neglected it from all of its air." i love it. maybe you could put more comma's in it to make it a little easier to read. sounds like a few run-on sentences in it. but it has great images and very descriptive

At first i did think that this was about nature but as i read it i understood it more! this is really good. great metaphor!

The rose turns to black as it wilts in despair,

i love that line...it appeals to me...idk why though.

xoxo kisses

Wow!
A great poem! 5/5
I really enjoyed reading this one a lot!!
Keep up the wonderful work!

Take care

This is a nicely written poem. The metaphor was wonderful, unique and rahter refreshing. I really enjoyed the read. Though, where you have the word "cruelness" I think cruelty would better suit that line. Also this line "For it is hoping that the end is very near.", though it may just be me, seems out of sync with the rest of flow in this poem. By the way, the flow overall was outstanding. Not to mention I really enjoyed your word choice. This was a great read. 5/5

marcella

From a technical standpoint i'd say that poem is very well written. it has a regular rhyme scheme and flows quite well. but from an emotive standpoint it doesn't do much for me. it doesn't grip my soul and make it want to shout nor cry. its pretty to look at but not soul touching.

Love is the law, love under will
Rocky

Hey
when i first read it i thought it was about nature but now i understand the metaphor:) great work i really like this line:
Cruelness and neglection are what this plant fears,
For it is hoping that the end is very near.

kisses stephanie

I love everything about this poem. The meaning behind it, the flow, the word choice and description. The story was told so well, with a strong ending. I can't give any helpful critique, as I think that this is written perfectly for what you wanted to put across. Well done. 5/5

Tammie

I love this poem!
i love how it makes the flower seem like a person if you know what i mean.
this poem definetly gets 5/5 from me!

Wow. This poem is truly beautiful, and deep. I enjoyed this one. The only error I found was the typo in the last line.

EXCELLENT JOB.

5/5.

I thought that it is a great write...
i cant find anythign wrong with it.
5/5