Beautiful poem! I enjoyed reading it.

This is such a sad poem. The pain of your loss can be felt in your words.

For one second
I imagine to get over you
I found I could die in my thoughts

Great job.
Take care Cindy

Wow thts really amazing wording..gr8 flow..u rock!!!
5/5

God bless u

For one second
I imagine to get over you
I found I could die in my thoughts

OH, what a sad poem.
Great job.

Aw. i like the way you wrote it. the parallel structure i think is what its called. just reading it reminded me of heartbeats. thanks for commenting my friends poem. and or poems...

5/5.

The poem speaks volumes of sincere love.The ending couldnot have been better than this. Beautiful poem.

Heya..
I really enjoyed reading your poem, the flow goes nicely, and it seems to me that it's really written from the heart... :)
keep it up!

x

Wow, this was a really good poem. That really describes how people feel when they are in love. We need that other person so bad, that when we are not with them, we feel like nothing. You did a great job on this one my friend.

Wow.
That was.. wow.
There were a few places it could be improved but the ideas were touching.
So sweet.
Made me smile haha.

Firstly I thought through outthe poem [imagined] would fit better.

"For one second
I imagine[d] life without you
I felt scary voices in [the] streets"

Adding the would make more sense. :]

"for one second
I imagine forgetting you
I [was] scared of ending breaths"

Adding was would make it make more sense.

"For one second
I imagine life without you
aching Hours changed in[to*] years"

That was my favourite stanza, Really made me go..wow.
But I think to instead of in would make more sense.

"For one second
i thought about your faded face
I saw a tear flow in[down*] my cheeks"

Down, again would make more sense.

The ending was..amazing.
I loved the ending.
It left me in awe.

Good work. =]

I liked it!

Your English grammar and tense is incorrect throughout most of the poem, is this because English isn't your mother tongue?
It was a good effort though. It was a simple write, and the parts I could understand were emotional.
Thanks for sharing.

I dont like that the stanzas are so short and i have to say "for one second" every 2 lines.... but other than that it is a great poem./ 5/5

One word. Beautiful. I loved reading your poetry i belive they hold strong emotions. This was amazing. Nice flow nice structure. Well done on this~mel

Been here and felt that
I love the way you pretty much read my mind when it comes to poems
great job

Wow!..Beautiful work!...Very well done hun!
The poem flowed smoothly and i like the structure too...Love was filled through out this peice...You've penned the emotionsreally well

Great job on this one!
5/5
xxPoojaxx

Wow, Firstly I'd like to thank you for commenting one of my poems. This poem is really passionate and deep. It shows great emotion!
xx Rox keep it up

I think you really like to use 'repetitions' xD but you are good at it! keep it up. Flow was good I really enjoyed reading your poems :)

-Sorry for the late comment btw :)

I enjoyed reading it, great work again :-) 5/5

You're so talented poet! I like everything about this piece, every stanza is greatly written and the ending is excellent.
My favorite stanza is:
-For one second
I decide letting you go
I saw million of grieves embracing me-
I'm adding this poem to my favorites :)
5/5

WOW. Excellently written poem. Ending is superb. Wording is great and topic is also interesting and unique. 5/5