Comments : Blood Instead of Ink

  • 10 years ago

    by Krysten

    Oh-My-God...really i mean thats like all there is to say, like i mean WoW. Great poem ---the flow and diction were really good, the subject...well---beautifuly writien on a subject that i would think would be hard to write on, but you pulled it off. i look forward to reading more of you work. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Anthony

    Dude I really like this. Absolutely favorite stanza was

    Verse after verse malicious words begin to appear
    Hastily creating torturous scenes as if he didn't care
    The words bled onto the paper but no pen was found
    Hands working frantically and the pen on the ground
    Awesome write! ^_^

    ~^_^Anthony^_^~

  • 10 years ago

    by Mousie

    Wow, your poems are always so good. the flow was off in the beginning, it just took me a second to get into the rhythm of the poem that's all. grammatically, you always use a great vocab, which is one of the things i love most about your poems. wonderful job again, i really enjoyed it, as always. 5/5 def.

  • 10 years ago

    by Crystal

    This poem is very meaningful and I like it a lot, your a great writer. Keep up the good writing and I hope everything goes well with that girl.

  • 10 years ago

    by Gothic Princess

    "In the fourth verse tears were pouring from his eyes
    Streaming down his face onto the paper as he cries
    But those tears turned into angry words as he wrote
    His impaired thoughts were wishing to slit her throat"
    This stanza hit me good and hard...so much anger and emotion. I loved how it flowed.

    ~*Twilight Shivers*~

  • 10 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I loved the darkness created here. It was perfect. The flow was good, although sometimes it felt like I had to rush the words in my head to keep the flow equal. I liked the words though, and how what you were saying in the poem, seemed to actually produce itself in YOUR actual poem. If that makes any sense at all, haha. I just liked how you were saying how the words turn more malicious, and you were highlighting this by changing the tone of your actual poem, too.

    Nice work. :)

  • 10 years ago

    by David

    So many words in each line yet i felt that it was not conjested and too many. well done!

    5/5 David

  • 10 years ago

    by AngelWithTheBrokenWings

    I like this poems. its really good.

  • 10 years ago

    by Aussie

    I lov the swaling of emotions. u use words like no one does. keep writing:)

  • 10 years ago

    by winterseve28

    Wow - I have never read a poem quite like this. What a strange dichotomy...great write though 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by winterseve28

    Wow - I have never read a poem quite like this. What a strange dichotomy...great write though 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    This is an amazing poem.
    You kept a good flow.
    Great job!
    5/5

    ~Chelsea

  • 10 years ago

    by Poetess

    Darien! Man, this poem gave me the chills. Lol...or maybe I'm just cold. hehe. Anyways, I love the description you used when each 'verse' was written. Excellent use of words. It was like I could picture everything going on. And the ending...it was just perfect. I dunno what to say. Amazing write! I didn't know your poems were so good. Haha. Never stop writing! 5/5

    ` Lens! =]

  • 10 years ago

    by Jessica

    WOW. Darien, I'd forgotten how amazing your poems were. This was FANTASTIC. I loved every word of it. Your descriptions were excellent, your rhymes worked brilliantly, and I loved the little twists you had hidden in it. Amazing poem, definetely a 5/5. I'm going to vote this to win the weekly contest. Very nicely done.

  • 10 years ago

    by kyleigh

    This is soo beautiful.
    I love it. :]

  • 10 years ago

    by Frank van Ojen

    That last verse was poor, and the opening was fair.
    But the rest was good.
    I could not give you a good, for the opening and ending where poor/fair.
    But a good poem nevertheless.

  • 10 years ago

    by debbylyn

    This whole piece is so well written....great flow and rhyme. The ending was awesome!

    Finally he wrote the last verse with utmost perfection
    His poem had taken a twist but he liked the direction
    It paralleled his emotions and also made him think
    Next time he writes he will use blood instead of ink

    Really enjoyed this one! All the best, Debbie

  • 10 years ago

    by Cooper

    Amazing. Beautifully written in a stunning style. I could feel emotion in every word. Truly an amazing write.

  • 10 years ago

    by azii

    Loved it! It was absolutely great! So deep and full of emotion.. Very touching... Great job! The Idea and the whole work was great! Nicely done!
    5/5
    Keep it up!
    best of wishes

    take care

  • 10 years ago

    by robin milford

    Excellent poem it is great