Comments : Just Another Disapointment

  • 17 years ago

    by Raychil

    Absolutely amazing Memoirs. I've missed you and you're poetry, yet this poem that you've come back with is simply remarkable. I loved every line. Please start writing more again, I've missed your poems and kind words. And whoever this poem is about that's hurting you, you're better than them my friend, you'll make it through this. I have you in my prayers. 5/5.
    <3Raych

  • 17 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    This is a great poem. very well written.

    ~Chelsea

  • 17 years ago

    by xo kisses xo

    I can't always have that halo
    Hovering ever so perfectly above my head.
    I wore it yesterday as an obligation
    And ended up throwing it away instead.

    i love that part the best! this is a really good poem. 5/5

    xoxo kisses

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This was very nicely written great work, it has showed your great talent. it is one of the best talent that i have had read here. I also had to nominate this poem to be weekly winner cause you really deserve it, once again great job and sure i will read more work of you as you are a great poet.

  • 17 years ago

    by Brigitte

    Oh very well done! I loved your discriptive unique way of writting. This poem kept my interest all the way through. I was a bit thrown off by the rhyming pattern in the first 2 stanzas... the words didn't exactly seem to rhyme like the rest of your poem did. Other than that, a really amazing write!

  • 17 years ago

    by Meet Me On Thames Street

    This poem was amazing, loved the flow and the descriptions you used. Very well written.
    5/5
    ~Nicole~

  • 17 years ago

    by ellewen

    Wow, very very deep. I like your flow, and style. My favorite part was " I can't always have that halo
    Hovering ever so perfectly above my head.
    I wore it yesterday as an obligation
    And ended up throwing it away instead."
    You make some great points here.
    Especially when you said "Who would know the light
    If they had never been in the dark?"
    The only thing i didnt like was how you ended it. It just stopped rather then ended. Ya know? lol its one of those poems you dont want to end. Its great keep it up. P.S. thanks for the comment.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Wow this poem was VERY deep! I think you did an amazing job this poem was fantastic!! I absolutly loved it!

  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    Wow, this poem is amazing and I relate to it deeply, so although you did not write it for me haha, thank you! You're language is very eloquent and distinguished. Excellent work! 5/5

    ~jas~

  • 16 years ago

    by Leah20

    Overall, pretty good. In this one the rhyme scheme felt a little forced and once again there was something a little off about the sentence structure. Keep writing!