Comments : The Innocence of Youth

  • 10 years ago

    by Kurt

    Great write. I love how you tied the ending in so well with the rhythm and theme of the poem. This was well written and displayed a great deal of time and effort.

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Oh wow...this has to be anothe favourite of mine by you.
    The first stanza was such a great openerand it just kept getting better and better.
    I thought the rhyme scheme was enjoyable and the flow was flawless.
    Excellent work, as always.

  • 10 years ago

    by winterseve28

    Hopefully she'll take the long way around and not follow the masses, or the stupid boy. Was there once a long time ago - peer pressure is a btch...great poem. You are so very talented :) 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Edward D Zurovec

    Very good write Karl and thoughtful as well. True Indeed.
    Peace and Blessings5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    The message behind the poem is fabulous. I loved it. this poem could have had a bigger impact through the rhyming and word choice, but its good.

  • 10 years ago

    by Im In Love What Can I Say

    Awww this is cute i like this i know how you feel this boyt tried the samething and you know it almost worked but i followed my heart and didnt do anything. great job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Leanne

    Very well written poem, i wish i could write like this. The flow was great, never faultered and the message to the poem was so true for a lot of people.

    So please follow your virgin heart,
    Do not mistake his lies for truth,
    All he's wanted from the very start,
    Is your sacred innocence of youth

    The ending was perfect, if only young girls out there could have someone give them this advice it would save a lot of heartache. Brilliant piece :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    This message is so true and written well. Impressive that it is written by a male. Good job. Looking forward to reading more of your work soon!

  • Wonderful poem. I'm sure a lot of girls can relate to this. It flowed well.
    Excellent write. 5/5

    :Sarah:

  • Oh great...now I feel like shit...it was a great poem and so true...but I still feel like an idiot...it had a good flow and I loved the last stanza...great write..
    Jonda Beth

  • 10 years ago

    by xo kisses xo

    Beautiful poem. so true! i love it. i have written a few poems similar to this. i know a great song that is like this too. 5/5 beautimous...

    xoxo kisses

  • 10 years ago

    by cowgirlstar26

    Now if all my friends could take this and apply it to their lives......I wish I would have :( anyhow great write, amazing message :)

    5.5

  • 10 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Amazing!
    This has got to be my favorite poem of yours, that you have ever written. And the truly sad thing is that all of this is true. =[ The flow was flawless, the word usage was great, and the emotions were pouring out through every word. Fantastic job, keep writing! 5/5

    Stephanie Lynn .+.

  • 10 years ago

    by silvershoes

    How touching...literally. Good poem, but I can't relate. The rhymes are simple, but I do that too at times. Why use complex words when basic words can get the job done?

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by TravisInABottle

    Very good. I think a lot of young ladies are having trouble with this. I hope they can all get the chance to read this amazing piece. Well done.

    -Travis[InABottle]

  • 10 years ago

    by tinkerbell

    Hey thnx for commenting my poem i like this poem because it explains the situation and the horrible truth of this fact so well but to realise that you have wrote something like this is great because it means your not one of those people that want to take other peoples innocence as there ares o many out there today wicked job 5/5 :)

  • 10 years ago

    by BeautifulDisaster

    I love this poem... it is amazing, and so true! love the rhyming and the flow of the poem the wording is great too

  • 10 years ago

    by Bianca

    Like always this is a great poem.. i really liked it and it is so true some guys are just jerks but wat can we do... keep up the good work like always... i really liked it

  • 10 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    This is deep! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Wow.
    This poem was splendid. & the sad thing is all of this is true, not one word was a lie. The emotions poured out through every word, the flow was flawless, & the vocab was wonderful. Keep writing! 5.5

    Stephanie Lynn .+.