Comments : The Day You Shed a Tear

  • 10 years ago

    by SiLeNtLy ScReAmInG

    I really liked it. The language and the way you stated things were really interesting. You had a lot of really good lines in the poem and all of them were very focused on the central idea that they usually wouldn't happen. Good Job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Alison

    The way its all worded, the metaphors are absolutely amazing! 5/5 good work! =]

  • 10 years ago

    by StormyStar

    Your writing is very different then what i have read before, i like the emotion, how you feel. i love you style.

  • 10 years ago

    by XXTruthSeekerXX

    Wonderful and very vivid job. To some extent, it is inspirational telling us that there are bigger things to cry about.

  • 10 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Hey,
    First of all thank you for your comment i really appreciate feedback. (And yeah they are a ton of typo's ill ocrrect them after i finish writing this comment).
    Anyways i really enjoyed this poem, the flow was good and the rhymes didnt seem forced. Your vocabulary was amazing and i was really enjaged in this poem. You created vivid imagery and i really loved it. Keep writing youve got talent! xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    I like the structure of this poem, and how you made some stanzas longer than others. It gives the poem a wonderful flow and beat to it.

  • 10 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    Your vocabulary and wording of this poem was really effective, it was full of imagery and original rhyming that seemed to flow, also quite twisted in some weird way, loved itxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Nick who Plays Pool

    That was a very exhilarating poem, especially in the first stanza and it had a rhythmic style to it. Well done 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Great poem! Awesome imagery and flow....really delivers the message effectively! 5/5 Debbie

  • 10 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This is a poem which i conseder as some kind of different poem that we dont get to read often.
    greatly done.

  • 10 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    This 1 is great!...lovely poem!!...the rhymings has made it look a lot better!..i love the way it flowed!...and it's very different from the kind of poems i've done befor!!!
    Luv it!an easy 5/5..n kp up de good wrk!
    xxPoojaxx

  • 10 years ago

    by Lisa

    Wow. Wow.. and again Wow.
    I have to admit to you.. when you said you only had a couple poems, I figured they probably wouldn't be that great.
    But just reading this one I completely take back any thoughts I previously had.
    Your rhyming was almost perfect, and the way you used your words to play an image for the reader is amazing!
    The first Stanza is my absolute favorite.
    As sad as the poem is, it's one I had to read again and again.
    If I could I would give you a 10/5
    But I guess a 5/5 will have to do..
    -Lisa.

  • 10 years ago

    by Patience

    Great poem. It was very intense and has an amazing flow to it.

  • 10 years ago

    by Maisie Martin

    Wow. seriously deep. my favorite of yours. you're so creative.

  • 10 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Omg I am sitting here in awe wondering how you wrote such an excellent poem. the flow was perfect, the word choice was inmeasurable the best, and everthing fit togather easily. the emtion are deep and clear, wonderul job, please keep writting.

  • 10 years ago

    by Sammerz

    This is an outstanding poem i like it a lot job well done

  • 10 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow I loved this poem.. It was so powerful and eliquant(Sp?) What I liked the most though was when reading it I couldnt help but read faster the more I got into it and then flow would speed up and make it sound that much more intense. I dont know if you intended it to be like that but thats just how it was. And then at the end I slowed right down and the ending hit like a lightening bolt. Amazing job. What I also liked was the stanzas how the first and last each had four lines while all the rest had two. Made the beginning and end stand out and demand more respect. Nice work. I loved it.

  • 10 years ago

    by Fsams

    Excellent I love the flow of this piece and like the wordings and the imagery. Great 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Manar

    Nice n new choice of words :) ...5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Cyma Khan

    GReatly done!!!
    Really great..

    God bless u