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by sibyllene   Mar 29, 2007


When mincing
at the margin
of a maddened,
dark abyss,
there is in all
this tipsy world
no trickier truth
than this:
its really not the
rough ravine
that turns your heart
to ice,
the several steps
that separate
you from slipping,
would suffice.
Instead of fear
of falling,
into the gaping gap, of
drowning in the darkened
sharpness of the
mountains lap,
you fear the thing
that, most of all,
you proudly thought
you knew:
the presence of the
black abyss
that hides itself
in you.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Carrotgirl

    Hi I was drawn in by your beautiful picture, hope that doesn't freak you out. Makes a change from seeing who's got the weirdess threads on the discussion board..... then check out their poems lol., I love the ending
    "you fear the thing that, most of all,
    you proudly thought you knew:
    the presence of the black abyss
    that hides itself in you."

    Two years ago I stood on that cliff face and made a dicission to carry on, maybe the black abyss is just too scary after all.

    People take what they want from others poems for me I your poem had extra meaning than most

    Elisha

  • 16 years ago

    by Domino0792

    Hey, hows it going? I really loved this poem, it had depth and emotion which made me really enjoy it! Well penned, keep the great writting up! 5/5

    Chan
    -xx-

  • 16 years ago

    by Tracy D Rollings

    Hi love your writing ,Excellent poem
    the presence of the
    black abyss
    that hides itself
    in you.
    well thought and well written , great job, 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Katie

    Oh wow. I love this one. The vocabulary is really great, and the flow is wonderful. It rolls off the tongue well. Nice job. :]

    P.S. I don't have a tune to it. I've never even written lyrics before, so I'm not that good at it yet. It needs some work. But thanks for the comment.

  • 17 years ago

    by Vegetable

    This poem has amazing rhythm and every single thought fits together so fluidly. I really enjoyed this. The rhyme is flawless, and really adds to the poem. I think lines 9-16 are my favorite. Great job.

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