Insane

by LockedInEternity   Mar 30, 2007


Cackles fill the hallway,
Laughter coming from the walls.
A house destroyed and haunted.
Crashing, burning as it falls.

Looking in the mirror,
It reflects another soul.
Pulled from out of satins grasp.
It talks to me in its new role.

Crimson dripping from the ceiling.
Lights come off the chamber shakes.
No water running yet the bathtub,
Overfills in bloody lakes.

Figures hidden by the shadows,
Drag themselves across the floor.
Hearing knocking from a distance,
Yet there's no one at the door.

Groans and rattles creep to earshot,
They see no matter where you hide.
Reaching hands slink out to grab you.
Coming out from every side.

Women screaming, children howling,
They are all asking for aid.
Can't do anything about it,
That's the way that I was made.

Whirlwinds of nightmares,
Loom through the mind.
A handful of descendants,
That had all been left behind.

A worried, pungent feeling,
Not getting any rest.
Bloodshot eyes are pulled wide open,
Can't go to sleep, it's for the best.

Never washing off the wall,
That god forsaken scarlet stain.
You're life's never the same again,
Confused, mad, hopeless, and insane.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Wow this poem really gives me goosebumps. It's really creepy lol. The imagery is so good that you can picture everything so clearly and it kinda creeps the reader out [at least it did for me.] hehe. But woow, amazing write. With fabulous imagery! The flow was amazing as well as the great word choice - very descriptive. :] Great work 5/5.

  • 15 years ago

    by ether

    This is an amazing poem, very dark and not in the least cliche. It also has a great flow and great rhyme. I really liked the ending, too. 5/5

    jess ~

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Imagery, gorgeous. So vivd and enchanting. The word choice seemed so simple yet so effective. Again hooked onto this piece. Quite interesting like you are telling a story. Again a 5/5 from me. ~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by repair her heart

    This poem reminds me of one of mine... i really like it . it was dark but it drew this picture in my mind like everything was black and white..I LOVED IT..kepp up the good work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Cackles fill the hallway,
    Laughter coming from [[the]] walls.
    The flow would be better without it.

    It talks to me in its new role.
    Something doesn't seem right about that line.

    Yet [[there's]] no one at the door.
    It'd sound better if you say
    There is.

    [[You're]] life's never the same again,
    It's your.

    Just like a bussiness letter,
    It just looks and sounds better
    Without contractions.
    I don't know... maybe it's just me.

    All in all.
    It's better than the last I've read.
    So 5/5