Comments : Your Life, Your Hands (Sonnet)

  • 16 years ago

    by Aussie

    Truly deep. i lov it:)

  • 16 years ago

    by Poetess Lana

    Hm... that gave me a lot to think about... its too early in the morning for thinking!!! still, brilliant poem. i really liked the last part...

    ___________
    "The person you really need the most is you
    and all of your dreams will finally come true. "
    ___________

    so deep. great write!!! 5/5

    Allanah

  • 16 years ago

    by azii

    Great job!!
    I love it love it love it love it!!!
    These lines:

    "The person you really need the most is you
    and all of your dreams will finally come true. "

    They're so beautifully written.

    Great poem. As all of your poems, this one had a very good rhyming as well..
    Keep up the wonderful work

    Best of wishes
    Take care

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    Hmm. The two middle stanzas need fixing. They just don't sound as good as your usual stanzas. This poem had a nice ending, and was thought provoking.

  • 16 years ago

    by Natalie

    The person you really need the most is you
    and all of your dreams will finally come true.

    ^^Loved those lines Darien!! This was such a good poem, with so much meaning! Awesome job! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    You did a great job on this poem. well done. 5/5 take care.

    ~Chelsea

  • 16 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awh, another great poem. This was very inspirational and made me think. The flow was good except in some parts I felt the rhyme was only chosen becuase it rhymed. The descriptions were great and the emotion was clearr. Great poemm hunn, 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    OoOoOo!!! I loved the originality in this poem you give so many examples and make the person really see what your poem is about I liked it!

  • 16 years ago

    by Marjan

    The person you really need the most is you

    I wish more people could get to read this. most of us may know it already. but we keep forgetting it every once in a while. that's sad :(

    Great line Darien! :)
    Marjan

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    I love that it was subtle.
    I didn't understand anything
    Until I read the title
    Then it all clicked like Shuh-bang. Lol.
    It was very well.
    The flow was nice, but not great.
    But all in all.
    I'll give you a four :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Seronum

    Thank you sir for thie enjoyable read. Keep up the great talent

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    I don't like third stanza it somehow doesn't fit but rest of this poem is excellent. Ending is very effective and few lines are really greatly written. I like the topic and this piece has some interesting, original rhythm. Rhyming is good except in last two lines,
    you-true is very typical rhyme and it doesn't leaves good impression in your poem.
    Anyway I like this one very much, you created great atmosphere in it and expressed your attitude clearly.