Saying Goodbye

by Hollymariee   Apr 1, 2007


** I wrote this poem for my friend Jeremy when his brother Jeff died in a car accident just a few days after his seventeenth birthday. It would mean ALOT to me if you commented or voted... thanks.**

When you lose someone you love,
You lose a piece of your heart.
You're completely overwhelmed;
Completely torn apart.

You try to accept that they're gone,
It seems too wrong to be right.
You search for their face,
But it's completely out of sight.

You listen for their voice;
But nothing is said.
You fall to your knees,
And tears are shed.

Everyone's trying to console you;
You just want to be left alone.
You want to try to be strong;
Try to heal on your own.

The funeral is coming;
You're so unprepared.
Your stomach is uneasy;
You're upset and scared.

The casket is open,
Your chance to say goodbye;
Even if you don't understand,
Why they had to die.

You look upon the grave,
Where an angel now lays.
You feel an ache in your soul;
Where that angel now stays.

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  • 9 years ago

    by Clinton Hills

    You are really an amazing writer. i home schooled myself, any tips on how i could get better?

  • 10 years ago

    by berbrag

    Emotional and heart touching...great work!

  • 15 years ago

    by Love is a Beautiful Thing

    Its a powerful poem it says so much you are so great at this keep it up girl

  • 15 years ago

    by SashaMirage

    This was a very sweet poem to write for your friend I am sure it means alot to him and has helped him through this difficult time.
    When you lose someone you love,

    You lose a piece of your heart,

    You're completely overwhelmed,

    Completely torn apart

    (These words really describe what it feels like right after you lose someone so close to you. The confusion and emptiness leaves you completely torn)

    You look upon the grave,

    Where an angel now lays.

    You feel an ache in your soul,

    Where that angel now stays.

    (Here you really touch the readers with your words and leave them feeling as empty and sad as if it has happened to them. You are definately a talented writer) 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    1st stanza - Ahh, I didnt like how completely was used in the 3rd and 4th lines right next to eachother.. but it didnt really effect the poem to mess it up so yeah it was alright.. but still it was like.. I wanted to read a different word, instead of the same one twice you know?

    Woow, this is a goosebump poem. This really gave me goosebumps.. Such a true write.. and it almost makes me cry because it makes me think of those I've lost, and how I've always felt like a part of my heart was missing with them gone.

    Wow. This was amazingly done.
    5/5.

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