Bryan
I have been waiting so long for a new poem from you. How beautiful....You have done an awesome job on this piece.

Y our beautiful smile tears me apart,
O nly one who can heal my broken heart.
U ntil the end of time, I'll love you,
R endered helpless, hoping you love me too.

You never disappoint.
Take Care Your
Friend Cindy

Wow bryan i thought this poem was really beautiful i enjoyed it alot. Well written~mel

Aww, Bryan! Welcome back! It's been awhile. I guess you forgot about our Collab... *sniffles* lol. Great to see you back here hun! Missed ya! Hope the writer's block is gone!

Ciao~

That was a very genuine, sweet poem. You did have a few mistakes, but Mooie Ogen already pointed them out. The rhyming was good and the flow was consistent, which is always good.

I liked it a lot.

This was a really nice acrostic, i loved how you made it ryhme and not just freestyle, like most acrostics are...very beautiful flow and i loved the topic of this poem, it was really cute...awesome job:)

Beautiful job on this form! It flowed well and was very sweet!

Wow! Great poem, well done!
I especially love the last 2 lines, really heartfelt!
Your rhyming is great but you have a few typo's but nothing major
*'E'verywher- E verywhere
Not sure, but anyway!
Its a great poem!
5/5
-Steph

Wow i'm spechless, you really are an amazing writer:) I especially love the first two lines:
Y our beautiful smile tears me apart,
O nly one who can heal my broken heart. 5/5

thanks for the nice comment and advice on my poem.

This was a great poem. It made me smile while reading it. Ah, there so much a smile can do to you. This was nicely written. I liked how it rhymed. Great job. <3 5/5.

Aww... that was beautiful. A wonderful acrostic that you have written. Lol, it was just so darn sweet! =]

"Y our beautiful smile tears me apart,
O nly one who can heal my broken heart.
U ntil the end of time, I'll love you,
R endered helpless, hoping you love me too."

^ Amazing. Simply amazing. Keep writing! 5/5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

I just came across this poem as I was looking at a contest. This was absolutely beautiful. I love acrostics and this was superbly written.

Bryan ur goin to make me cry ur so sweet y cnt aussie guys b like that?? it beautiful keep writtin them

WOW I was speechless in this poem.. all I can say is.. You're really talented! I hope i can be as good as you someday.. TC :)

"Your beautiful smile tears me apart,
Only one who can heal my broken heart.
Until the end of time, I'll love you,
Rendered helpless, hoping you love me too."
wow!!...lovely lovely poem..Beautifully penned acrostic!!...Kp it up!
xxPoojaxxx

This is awesome thanks for the comment on "Sinful obsession"

OMG i love it. And a girls smile is very precious. :-) one of my favourite poems yet.

XXIvyXX

I really liked this it's creative

Comment #6:
This is by far my favorite of yours thus far! I LOVE LOVE LOVE this poem. Just everything about it! There is no possible critique! The whole idea of an acrostic that actually makes sense! It was easy to understand while still being SO beautifully deep. And the respect you have for this woman. As well as how it truly feels like all you do is eat, sleep, and breathe her. This is def. going in my favorites! AMAZING JOB! 100/5! :) :) :)
~Midnight Sun

Yeay! :)

this is sweet! you have again a great flow and a very good way of bringing across a message.
I don't have anything to add here... 5/5!

~* Natasha *~

Aww this one is so beautiful, that i just could not leave without commenting, loved it, absolutely 5/5...Melody..=)