Comments : The Day I Died

  • 16 years ago

    by aisyned

    I LOVE THIS POEM! you are such a greeat poet. nice job hun

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Gasttlee
    Very dark and sad thoughts put into this piece.

    I have no regrets,
    for in actuality the day I died
    was also the day
    I was born.

    This stanza really makes you think.
    Great job!
    Take Care Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    This is great, but i have to disagree with you somewhere. You express yourself more than me.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Very good poem, incredible imagery, I like the topic, it's very unique and well written.
    -I became darkness itself.
    I became a shadow
    like none ever seen.- powerful stanza.
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Travis

    Wow... I don't know what else to say. It's just wow... It's so dark, and powerful. It's a great poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Cainer

    That was very nice! the last lines were great!

  • 16 years ago

    by resisting reason

    Hey hey, very awesome, keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Very dark and very powerful piece. Great write. 5/5

    marcella

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    Wow.
    You know when I read really good dark poetry, especially when it talks of alcohol, I think of Edgar Poe.
    No Lie.
    he's amazing. (:
    Lol, anyway.
    I thought of him when reading this.
    And, that says a lot from me...

  • 16 years ago

    by gack60

    Wow! real intense stuff, loved this poem, even no there is no rhyming structure it flows perfectly and portrays a very good story.

    well done mate.

    5/5

    Gary.

  • 16 years ago

    by Christina

    Wow wat a sad poem
    keep up the good work!
    i felt the sadness of this poem

    <3 i love you silly

  • 16 years ago

    by Solus

    Hmm....kinda sounds like me.

  • 15 years ago

    by BurriedFaceDown

    Very powerful. Chilling. Mysterious.

    I drowned in darkness
    like a sick drunk
    diving in the ocean.
    ^^^
    I love how you compared it to this. It makes you think of how you would feel before you die