Comments : Feed You

  • 16 years ago

    by Cherise

    Wow :| i loved this, and being a tatl hippy, i understand where your coming from, but i found one little mistake..

    "it's easier to ignore you friend in need."

    should it be "your"?

    anyway my dear great poem, and it tells the truth, i love it! 5/5

    lovee you
    -cherise

  • 16 years ago

    by TravisInABottle

    This poem makes me shed a tear, yet also smile. It's truly disturbing what they do to animals, isn't it? I shed a tear because this is a sad poem. No animal deserves this. Not even to keep us humans alive. I smile because I am glad there is one more person out there who agrees with me. I do hope you back up this poem by being a vegetarian. :]

    -Travis[InABottle]

  • 16 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    Aw. This poem is so sad. But oh so very true! How awful!

    A dis configured smile [I'm not too sure that 'dis configured' is a word. Or the appropriate word, you may want to check that out. maybe use another word instead].

    slautered [should be slaughtered*]

    Immasculated [I think that should be 'Emasculated' , I don't think 'immasculated' is a word].

    The flow was a bit off/rocky in some places. But overall: I really liked it.

    Bri x

  • 16 years ago

    by Darien

    I liked the vocabulary you used in this poem, however you did not use them to the full potential. You basically wrote the word, without any support whatsoever. There was substance missing in this poem. They were just words, adjectives and verbs without a noun. I hope you understand that. Also, I noticed a few spelling mistakes as well. Edit the poem again, and I think you'll find them. Good job though, I understood the point you were making, it just wasn't very clear.

  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wow, such great emotion within the poem, great job and excellent flow. Keep up the great work.

    Peace, Joe