This was good.... U got ur award! good job! ttul

I think it's definitly one of your better poems!! nice job!

I think this is a really great poem loved how you portrayed this it was really well written and had a great meaning across it! Well done on this poem a great job!

I liked this. I liked the overall flow. You had a good useage of vocabulary. It kinda creates this image in teh readers head. A good read like that. The structure could of been improved htough. I really liekd the reptiiton of "I spin and spin". The title of the poem makes the reader intrested in what the poem is about. Unwinning battle and beaty dont go togerther. Loved how you did that. I htpought you should of used punctuation as it would of helped the reader read the poem liek you wanted it to be read. Keep it up! xx

Ah i think this has a lot of potential. this flowed well and the message and story it told was so cool.

5/5 David