March of the machines 2:21 am

Lol you must be bored at class too? =P

Anyway it was a good poem, I'm really curious why the title has '2:21 am' in it.
The flow was okay you have some minor errors though.. well if you don't want to chance it.. it's okay :) just don't do it in the future *hihi*

1st.. capitalize the I's :)
2nd.. Ive = I've :)

Nonetheless it was a good poem.

So accidental destruction of your brain and thoughts? Is that right? Maybe?....I love it anyway. You are awesome. 5/5 and you (as an author) added to my faves! great work as usual....

Haha! I like this one. The definition of mung made me laugh...I don't really know why. The poem itself has a nice flow, and as I've said before...your word choice is epic. Wonderful job,
Kelsea

I've read alot of your work. And I have to say that it is different, but not in a bad way. You're ways of using words is really amazing. Unique is what everyone else is using, but I have to agree, it is a good word. lol Your poems are very unique, and just beautiful. Keep writing. I enjoyed this poem thoroughly. =) Thanks for posting, and thanks for the comments.
-Ally

The flow is off. Maybe try shortening the lines some. Make them about the same length.