Fantastic poem...

*isabel*

Hi Shadow! I see that your still writing your magnificent poems. This poem was great and sad. I see one mistake though in the line when you say:

You watched it momentarily suspended in mid-air
and the turned away.

The line was great, you just need to add an N to The to make it Then. Other then that it was perfect. I love your writing and I apologize for missing so much of it. Things have been kind of chaotic in my life lately. Keep up the wonderful work hun.

Love
Letty

**But you seem unphased
As you slowly compress and shatter it.**
i loved that part the best. As if the person just didnt have a heart at all. and the -slowly- gives of a sensation of the other wanting to hurt.
your writing gives off so many images. while reading, we can just imagine the whole thing.
the end is full of emotion, anger, sadness, desception. All mixed. you really gave off the emotion you wanted to .