Comments : Confessions of a Broken Friendship

  • 10 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    Well written and calm tone, while staying emotionaly focused. i like it. alot of freindships are
    tested when it comes to relationships.

    5/tom

  • 10 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Wow, this poem just touched my heart, how nicely you described something that exactly i can relate to............... I like the use of the word (A LIE) how it can destroy many things.........including friendship, love and far behind.
    truly a well deserved 5/5 poem........ you are very talented.

  • 10 years ago

    by Jessica

    Ooh, this was very intense and a little confusing. The flow was pretty good as were your descriptions. The emotion was very strong and that really shone through in the poem. Although not all of the rhymes worked perfectly they were pretty good. Nicely done hun. 4/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Hey Brittknee

    Aww such a sad poem
    =/ broken friendships hurt
    i dunno what else to say

    brittany (MD)

  • 10 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    I can't really relate with this poem. BUT it is a very good poem. It told a story within. I could feel what the girl was going through. Very good job. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Victoria Rainey

    Omg!! your poem is really good and have good choices of word and of course also powerful .. thanks for the comment!! btw added u to my favs!! good job 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Wallace

    Very good peom, I loved the flow and it well written and well structured, good job.

    Best wishes
    Wallace

  • Great poem. The flow was excellent and the rhyming wasn't forced.
    A lot of emotion was shown.
    Keep it up 5/5

    |Sarah|

  • 10 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    Awesome poem, I got confused in the beginning but I got it at the end, love poems like that, anyways, the flow was great, nice rhythm. Oh yea...

    "She spoke to her foregoing friend,
    And confessed why they had to end.
    "I felt horrible about what it was I did,
    But your boyfriend wanted what I had to give."

    On the third line, in my opinion, you should take off "it was" and just have it..

    "I felt horrible about what I did,"

    Well thats all I got. Great poem. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Kalee

    This is a great poem. The flow and rhyming was perfect. It was a great read. 5/5

    Kalee

  • 10 years ago

    by CHOKE

    Lol, wow! that surprise ending just twisted everything i was thinking in the beginning. complete adoration for this one love! quite a jigsaw puzzle, eh? 5/5.

  • 10 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Wow, this is really amazing, really liked your choice of words and the way you expressed whole incident. Great write indeed

    all the best and take care

  • 10 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    This is very heartfelt, and quite sad. You tell the story very nicely, and while I wish some of your wording could have been a bit more developed, this was a nice poem.

  • 10 years ago

    by Julienne

    *awesome poem! loved it, i can relate so closely and i really admire how you connected with me!! thank u for posting, and thanks for asking me to comment or i would never have read it!! xxx

  • 10 years ago

    by oldthings

    You did a very good job of writing this poem, and i think alot of people can relate to the story that you tell in it. The fact that you told the story with such a steady rythm and a simple yet enjoyable rhyming scheme makes it all the better. Great job hun. loved it alot =)

  • 10 years ago

    by amanda flood

    Excellent poem i think most people can relate to this poem we have all been there before,anyway i enjoyed it well done 10-10

  • 10 years ago

    by amanda flood

    Excellent poem i think most people can relate to this poem we have all been there before,anyway i enjoyed it well done 10-10

  • 10 years ago

    by Debbie

    Technically speaking, I find it hard to read. The flow was rather unsteady as I stumbled on several lines and stanzas. Stanza 2 seems to be misplaced, and should be transferred in the latter part of the poem.

    On the whole, this was a fine piece of work. [Once enhanced and improved, the better.] I believe this piece can correlate with people's experiences. So do the people who have "broken friendships." Reading this makes me want to shudder, it's traumatically horrid to remember some of my memories...
    Well done upon writing this poem. Good job.
    Keep on writing what you feel and like. all the best and take care.
    Debbie

  • 10 years ago

    by Debbie

    My apologies, I in no way to offend... I was just being honest, like what you asked in your thread.
    Peace much.

  • 10 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem delivered a lot of emotion, while my guess is it was good therapy for you to get this of your chest so to speak. The quotes made it seem more real. Some readers have a problem with redundant “ands” and they are easily replaced by more imaginative words like “while “and “as” but that is the authors choice. All in all, the poem flowed nicely and got the point across