Oh my gosh Rebecca your poem is like so awesome! I mean it was so effective, I felt every word you wrote. It made me feel like I was that girl. Keep it up and I think your in the right category. Hey check out my poem called prisoner and tell me what you think. oh my niece says she feels what you are saying and that you hooked up that poem.

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Kiara M. and
niece Nyshia

That was one of the best poems i have ever read.......very amazing.......its like i was her, feeling wat she was feeling, going through wat she was.........all i can say is wow!

Great job lots of power and im sure whatever you wrote during that year is awesome maybe awesomer then this though this is pretty awesome lol well good job and thx for the comment

keenan

Great poem again well written and the flow was great, good choice of words and love the line:"If you love me god, Then why is it this way?
Why am i suffering each and every single day?
Why God, Have you forgotten me?
I'm right here, Are you too blind see?"
See I was abuse for 15 years and I use to think and feel the same way everyday,wondering if there would be a tomorrow, thanks for sharing ,~5/5~ your friend Tracy

Aaah it was sad nicely done 5/5

A very poweful piece. The imagery created in this played in my head as I read it. The flow was excellent as was the vocab, suiting this poem very well. 5/5

Tammie

Wow, I absolutely loved the emotion put into this poem.

In her last hope she took out Gods book
And scribbled these words to thee.
I have faith, In you God
But do you have faith in me?'

That stanza was perfect to sum up this poem.
You have an amazing talent.
5/5

_-Amber-_

Thankyou for the comment :]

You're stuff is great, moving and interesting.
Keep it up.

Kiki

A very moving and powerful poem. I liked it - as a lot of other people said on here - it also made me feel like that girl - I think everyone who's had a hard time before (ie. almost everyone in existence) has cried out to "God" at some time or other in desperation.

The only thing I could say is to watch the structure of your poem - sometimes the stanzas were four lines to a stanza and rhyming "a,b,c,b" but then other times you would string two lines together to make it a two sentence stanza with just "b,b" ... if you know what I mean?

Great poem.
So sad.
Good rhyming, and great word choice.
Loved reading it.
Take care

A wonderfully written poem! i loved every word. very detailed.
and i think it should be in the "poems about life" catergory, under faith and religion. something of that sort. but it still fits with sad poems though. keep up the good work!