Comments : Broken speech

  • 16 years ago

    by Dead Inside

    I really liked it. Try to make it flow a little easyer and dont force the rhyme so much. A poem doesn't always have to rhyme for it to be amasing. other than that, it was pretty good.

    cesar

  • This one is not your best.
    The flow was off a bit.
    But the emotion was shown

    4/5

    [Sarah]