Another awesome poem.. Your knowledge of poetry is also extrodinary.. The flow and wording was perfect.. I really enjoyed this one...This isn't something everyone tends to write about.. Great job!! 5/5
Tyanna

This is awsome. i could never take the time to scheme out a triolete. nice work indeed. i like the way you made this flow even though im not a big fan of repeating.

5/tom

God damn. The poetic form makes what would have been a great poem anyway simply amazing.
Good job.

Wow great poem, i enjoyed reading it because as usual your choice of words are great.
nuff luv xx

Wow, I'm speechless. I think this is your best so far. You make me want to try this style out. I haven't written a poem for quite a while. This poem gives me a good start to a new inspiration.

Wow! Sheena Dear, that was amazing, I really liked that piece. They keep getting better and better Honey.

5.5

Wow I really liked this poem I was always amased because I've read so many religious poems but not one of them have I read yet talked about Adam and Eve and that story. You always choose some very random topics to write about but you always manage to pull with off with such flair. "All we are are god's disgrace," This I found was such a powerful line especialy when you repeated it. I think it meant so much to me because its a different outlook then what everyone else always says. Its so different then he loves you etc and so forth. But I really loved how you talked about how great heaven was then how bad hell is and how we fell and can't go back. Nice work, 5/5 for style, creativity, and originality.

Cool format - you did a good job of making it seem pretty natural, although the flow could've been a little bit better. the poetry itself is amazing - beautiful, trenchant - you get the idea. great writing!