Comments : So I Cry

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammi

    Wow this poem is amazing and I feel ur pain and I know what u r going through but dont give up for u will find someone who is worth ur love for I di 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie

    I agree with Tammi. You just have to wait, one day true love will arrive. =) Be patient. Anyway, the poem was amazing. The emotions were strong & the flow was flawless. Keep it up! 5.5

    Stephanie Lynn .+.

  • 16 years ago

    by Bryan

    This is a pretty nice poem, i like the way it resembles a lyric, the flow is nice, but i give it a 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    It was so amazing, and i feel your pain, it was so beautiful

  • 16 years ago

    by Sydney

    OOO! So beautiful! Wonderful flow. No such thing as perfect I hear but im so tempted to use that word! ^_^

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Something I have to compliment you on is your rhyming: it's perfect. The words just seem to flow onto the page.

    Something I recommend, though, is using more punctuation in between your lines. E.g.:

    "for every moment you held me in your arms,
    every time you silenced me with your charms,
    every breath we took every laugh we shared,
    every moment that reminded me of how much you cared.

    ^ In the third line here, it should be written like, "Every breath we took[,] every laugh we shared,"

    "I know you do not want someone like me,
    opinionated and stubborn and not so pretty,
    I try to beautiful I really do,
    but I know in myself I am not good enough for you."

    ^ In the third line here, I think you mean, "I try to BE beautiful[,] I really do,"

    Overall, nice job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    This is a sweetly written sad poem. The ryhming was amazing as throughout all your poems i've read. I agree with the person above with puncuation but that can not drop my overall rating i give you being 5/5 ~mel

  • 16 years ago

    by STEVE

    I love your poem 5/5 your words say it all

  • 16 years ago

    by TillyMariex

    Oh God that was just beautiful…it reminded me of my life…I mean I AM pretty but with that certain boy…I don’t feel so pretty anymore, ya kno? Anywayz, great poem. Real emotional.

  • 16 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow this was awsome I loved the message and everything that this poem showed. I also liked how you manged to split up the stanzas in the beginning and not ruin the flow in the process, wonderful work. What I loved the most was how this poem seemed to directed at someone yet also speaking from the mind and to no one in particular. Wonderful.

    The only corrections I have is that to make sure that all of the I's are capitalized and the very last line should have a question make instead of a period because it was a question.

  • 16 years ago

    by KATIE

    AWW I HAVE A NEW FAVORITE!..THIS WAS REALLY GOOD!