Comments : Cast behind your shadow

  • 16 years ago

    by Tracy D Rollings

    I really like your poem ,very good job, will be reading more ,thanks for sharing ,,,,,Tracy

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Hun,

    No one knows better than me how this feels. A very emotional write. Filled with pain & hurt.

    "Tired of not being good enough
    exhausted from trying to be.
    I am no angel nor close to it
    I have only ever been, just me."

    ^ That stanza struck a cord with me. Fabulous job! Keep writing! 5.5

    Stephanie Lynn .+.

  • 16 years ago

    by Bryan

    This is a very sad poem but very good, loved the flow, its a perfect 5/5!!! keep them coming!!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    "Tired of not being good enough
    exhausted from trying to be.
    I am no angel nor close to it
    I have only ever been, just me."
    this part has to be my favorite. This poem is truly amazing, I was stunned by the word choice, and blown away by the emtions so deep and strong. Truly a beautiflly written poem you have here, a perfectly flawless write.5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Alesia

    To be honest, I really loved this poem. It was truly smashin'! The flow was really good. The whole poem was very much emotive, and you made what you had to say very clear. I love the wording as well. Fantastic job, and keep it up.

    Alesia

  • 16 years ago

    by The Pessimistic Peabody

    Wow i can really relate to this. Overall it a very good poem, full of feeling. The flow is a little shaky and there is 1 or 2 mistakes, like "lead" and "dead" do not rhyme well. I loved the 6th stanza though. Very heartfelt keep up the good work

  • 16 years ago

    by LithiumSacrifice

    5/5 excellent poem. wonderfull job.

    i loved this stanza?

    "That my pain and suffering was worth it
    that losing my soul made you see,
    everything I have done in this life
    was in the hope you would appreciate me."

    that was my fav. but the WHOLE poem was very impressive and well done. I absolutley loved it.

    *adds you to fav*

  • 16 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    I really like this a lot. Especially the ending. I like how the reference to 'burning' makes the image of 'Hell' seem so much more real.

    "An empty echo of laughter,
    covers the in dismissible sound of tears,"

    ^ 'in dismissible' should be 'indismissable'.

    "Enough tears to fill the ocean,
    enough pain to kill a heard.
    enough silence to scorn a def man"

    'Heard' should be 'herd'.
    'Def' should be 'deaf'.

    Overall, it was an enjoyable read.

  • 16 years ago

    by Fsams

    Wow great, this is really nice. The consecutive rhymes are so well written it really caught my attention. You deserve 5/5 and you got it :)

    Tc
    Fsams