Comments : I Wished for You

  • 16 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    I like your use of repetition.
    Some of the words could ahve been better but I still enjoyed it GOOD job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Seronum

    This poem may be very short but i still think its good. you have talent good job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Short but great.
    i think you have a great talent with words.
    keep it up cause your poems are great.
    a 5/5 from me.

  • 16 years ago

    by Darien

    This was a really sweet poem, but you didn't have to write 'I wished' in every line. Actually, I don't know, I guess it's alright. I think everything after that was the deeper part of the poem. Good stuff though.

  • 16 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    Maybe not as good as your other poem but still just as sweet good job :D

    xxx alex xxx

  • 16 years ago

    by ImNotPerfect20

    That was so cute.. lol good job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Faded

    It was short, but i still liked it, i think u could have used different words or worded it differently to make the flow just a little better, but overall, it was still a great poem. 5/5 keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by Austin

    Short and sweet..wonderful loved it..great job 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Great sweet poem. The flow was a little off though. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    This was sweet.
    Short and precise.
    It seemed a bit forced in the ending
    But still really, really sweet.
    It seems like you knew exactly what to say.
    I love it.
    Anywayz,
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    It is indeed sweet.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I found this to be really sweet, it made me smile whilst reading it.
    I liked the opening line, it pulled me into the poem.
    Flow was good throughout, but I think this could have been a little longer.
    I liked the ending, it was beautifully written.

  • 16 years ago

    by The Pessimistic Peabody

    This was really sweet. nice expression. keep up the good work. nice quick but meanigful love poem, and not too lovey-dovey

  • 16 years ago

    by honeypot

    Short and sweet!
    My only criticism would be that the penny upon the ground part didnt really fit perfectly.so would be worth thinking of alternatives maybe: I wished on a penny upon the ground? same words just a different way round seems to help the flow?

    Nice work though x

  • 16 years ago

    by Alesia

    Short, simple, and straight to the point. It was very lovely indeed! Good job.

  • 16 years ago

    by Independence Forever

    Short and sweet, good job and keep up the good work.

    your servant:
    david

  • 16 years ago

    by awww

    You might get this a lot but its true... short and sweet... it was quite refreshing... thanks for that... im glad i read it... it brings a smile to peoples facesü

    ~angel~

  • 16 years ago

    by AlaSkA

    Reminds me of a poem i wrote in highschool. about wishes needing shooting stars. good write.

  • 16 years ago

    by M i s s B e v a n x

    That was well good i thought!! made me think of the one i love!!

  • 16 years ago

    by beautiful xx disaster

    Sweet,short,cute.... sounds a little bit like a bunch of pick up lines put into a poem though... i still think it is good...

    not as good as your other poems (all 5/5s of course), but i chose to comment this one because i think it is really good... but sounds a little bit corny....

    but dont get me wrong i still think that it is amazing
    <3jess