Second stnza, third line. "Stairs" should be "stares" other than that, great poem. i enjoyed the repetitive style.

Aven

Great poem, short but full of meaning. I really like the deepness that seems to be behind the poem....GP

I liked this, and i like how you can put a meaning into a shortish poem. Gd job.

And in reply to your comment. I wasnt trying to rhyme. And thankyou for your advvice.

As mentioned in the earlier comment..i guess it shud b "Stares" intead of "stairs"...other wise it's very well penned...short n meaningful...i love such works..n not all tht good in writing short ones...u seem great in it...kp writing!
Tk care!
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