Comments : Untold story from the Angel

  • 10 years ago

    by Kalee

    This is a wonderful poem David. There was one little thing wrong with it. In "Yet I push through anther day". you spelt 'another' wrong. Othr then that little thing, it was a great read. 5/5

    Kalee

  • 10 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    Wow, David, I can honestly say that I am at a loss for words. I can say that I know what it is like to want to be free from so much pain, but to put in words as elegantly as you have is truly amazing.

    Keep writing and never loss track of your gift. Your talent will carry you far through life in ways that you have yet to experience.

    --Sher

  • 10 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wow, just wow. This was intense, I loved it. The emotion within this poem was outstanding. You are a very talented writter, keep up the amazing work. I enjoyed the read.

    Peace, Joe

  • 10 years ago

    by Cindy

    David
    Very dark and deep thoughts. Good job!

    Untie the cable round my wings
    Set me free and let me fly
    Don't hold me down, I need to leave
    My true home is in the sky

    I really was touched with these lines.
    Take care Cindy

  • 10 years ago

    by Tammie

    Woah. This is a very unique poem. I've never read something like this. The story was original and I like everything about it. It was sad, yet so powerful with the expression of emotion. Your word choice is really well used in this, which helps the description and imagery along very well. The flow was good, as was the rhyming. Excellent write David. =] 5/5

    Tammie

  • 10 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Love the opening lines...

    Untie the cable round my wings
    Set me free and let me fly
    Don't hold me down, I need to leave
    My true home is in the sky

    Well written and thought provoking.....All the best, Debbie

  • 10 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    Love the imagery! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Leona

    Wow this is really good great great job..............leona

  • 10 years ago

    by firexdancer

    Wow this is reallllly strong, the flow is pretty good too, and the emotion is so there. it is really beautiful, and really is so breathtaking i don't know what to say!!!
    5/5
    gabriella

  • 10 years ago

    by carissalynn

    I couldnt take my eyes off it once i started reading, very well written, and very enjoyable.

  • 10 years ago

    by Crystal Redl

    Wow, i love how you've set it out so your readers will actually imagine this happening once again you've done an excellent job. = ) 7/5
    crystal ps. you have never commented my work =(

  • 10 years ago

    by Crystal Redl

    Wow, i love how you've set it out so your readers will actually imagine this happening once again you've done an excellent job. = ) 7/5
    crystal ps. you have never commented my work =(

  • 10 years ago

    by why is life so miserable

    Wow your good i enjoy this poem and couldnt take my eyes off it good job 5/5 X)
    ----- cynthia m.

  • 10 years ago

    by Wallace

    Wow, excellent poem, it had a real meaning behind it, and easy to relate to. Good work, 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by always in my heart

    Very good!

  • 10 years ago

    by Milo

    This was extraordinary, i loved it, so much emotion. keep it up

  • 10 years ago

    by stormy

    Wow. i really like it.

  • 10 years ago

    by Sasha

    This is a relaly nice poem i like it it kinda leaves room for the imagination as to what happened.. and yet tells the wole story
    Nicley written

  • 10 years ago

    by Destiny

    I love this poem like all of your poems. You are an wonderful writer. You are a great mentor to me and many others. Thank you!!!!

  • 10 years ago

    by steffff

    Very well written. original and i like it. :] keep up the good work!